Yah vs CREAM (tourny battle 5)

[Spyder]

Yah
Freespeech killed cream before he could ever plead 1st,
Then you set up the brackets yourself and got me 1st?
Geez jerk someone give this guy a damn brake,
Cuz now im flyin over "C" like United Airway,
Its the multi king Muscogee creek so bitch stop the stupid show,
When I start to stomp you you'll " b flat" like music notes,
This dude is slow well ill move on from beatin this one,
Just wrote this whole verse while bottle feeding my son

CREAM
You're an mixed arts fighter, MYTH , i run the rap Olympics
I'm not Brazilian but i'l stab you to death, i'm bout the mack of this shit
El Dorado-asian-looking "Tousan" with a ripped-up tattoo
Use a "Wolf Kamehame-Hah" to rip you up like Man-goes
You left the forum, bought a pitbull and bought back no hype
All what you did is story-telling and you bumped the After-Lyfe
Making you yell "Hah" and drive your Supra mad onto the Arctic ocean
You're flipped upside down, i'm not even saying "Yah" it's without emotion

1/2 - viewtopic.php?p=1621490#p1621490 WORD, and flying around with that wanna-be Jackie Chan moves is a fantasy
3 - He's from Kansas city and he looks asian, Tousan is Dad in japanese , he got this weird (but cool) tattoo viewtopic.php?f=21&t=111181
4 - Wolf is "all over his family" as a name, DBZ is an asian cartoon, Wolf is referring to super sayan 4 .. Hah is a play on his name like gone in an instant, and Mangoes are fruit (fo' real), Manga (japanese comics) and Man Goes in an instant .. working wit Hah pretty well
6 - How he bumped this old battle viewtopic.php?f=26&t=100125&start=15
7 - Link in 3rd line breakdown he says he bought an '87 Toyota Supra, and Kanye's famous "HAAH" + a play on his name, and referring to my own location
8 - He's getting flipped "Upside down", "Hah" in the 7th line and Yah in the 8th line (Flipped) and i'm not even happy about it cause it's expected

Wreck moves on as Lello didnt send a verse

[Spyder]

(3) Punchlines - Yah no good though
(3) Personals - CREAM
(2) Multies - Yah
(1) Flow - yah
(1) Structure - Yah
(1) Vocab/Complex -NA
(1) Other - Na


7-3 Yah

not a good battle Yah u need to step up, i know u can bring complexity and multies but u did not incorporate them here

[ThomasAguanis]

(3) Punchlines - Yah- harder hitting than CREAM's, CREAM's were mostly personal jabs.
(3) Personals - CREAM- tattoo and car. Yah didn't really have any.
(2) Multies - Yah- clearly.
(1) Flow - Yah- I felt it flowed way smoother.
(1) Structure - Tie- another battle where both have similar, slight line up flaws.
(1) Vocab/Complex - CREAM- he has a lot of complex references in his verse.
(1) Other - "Creativity"- CREAM- The DBZ and other references/name flips were very creative.

7-6 Yah

Yah- Good verse, but it's nothing compared to what I thought I read from you in the past. You barley edged this. I know you're capable of more, but maybe you're just holding back this round? I don't know, but you'll have to bring your A-game in later rounds. There's not much more I can say that I feel you already don't know. I look forward to seeing your verses in later rounds, you've impressed me in the past.

CREAM- Your verse was good too. I think you focused on personals a bit too much though.You put a lot of work into finding personals and it was pretty creative, but it lacked punches. You also need to work on multis and other skills as well. You seem to be into battling, so keep it up and you should improve in time. If you need assistance with anything, ask around, I'm sure people here will help you if you need it (not saying you do, but sometimes advice from someone more experienced can only be beneficial). Keep doing your thing, and don't let a loss discourage you, you almost had this.

[Yah-hah]

Ha yeah I had a baby less than a week and a half ago just got back from the hospital monday and still worked a 40 week. I'd seen a few of his battles (no offense I think this was the best battle ive seen u in) and figured I wouldnt need alot of crazy shit. Just been mad busy lately. But great job cream btw im Native american the tattoo is a dreamcatcher pretty recognizable but idk about in brazil. I put myself out there alot more than most people so personals are easy to get for me

[Spyder]

yah wins 2-0