^thanks for votin...
3-1 to me. Keep it comin
Rain Against Iceaxe
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by James R. » May 12th, '07, 01:45
Rain
fantastic just buy a dam casket, log yur life so I can make my auger psycho
yur jaws be all, who saw me fall, tha top blast u'll drop last, tha water cycle
man I dont know if it's just me but that didnt make sense. I see a bunch of multies and bunch of rhyming but I dont see what line 1 has to do with line 2 and the punch doesnt really go with the rest of the line as far as I can see.
1/5
sparks meet yur dark theatre, I call u bark eater, as u'll see slugs galore
u won't do me harm, I work axes like a tree farm, yur a casualty of tha war
much better, I understand where you're goin wit that and the punch was pretty decent
3/5
some made me threaten iceaxe will be a 187, u see I text tha truth nice
yur mind'll worry, cuz I am yur final jury, everything I type executes ice
hahaha that was decent, definitely the best bar of your verse everything worked out nice, the flow coulda been a lil tighter but yeah nice close
4/5
8/15
Axe
there's myths condenced in his mind that he's intense with his rhymes
i see no pith or sence in the lines so what's the intent with your time
ooh damn nice opener, real nice opener. nice multies and nice punch. I like the attack on him not making sense, gettin kinda personal about his style
4/5
I just see dead-letters and none of the sinner's breath
get your head-better it's just one of the winner's steps
After I read all the stuff about this it became a much better bar, I dont think it hits the same as the 1st but it's still solid
3/5
I be-dead-set my path's-whet-jets-at-vets by fast-step
he-tread-bled and blasts-threats-yet-that-set was a crap-test
Again after reading the explanation it was a much better bar but it was just solid because all the multies threw off the flow. I've always liked it a lil better when you get in some subliminal hits but your not so complex the reader can't get what you're saying about your opponent. But it was decent.
3/5
10/15
Ice takes it
fantastic just buy a dam casket, log yur life so I can make my auger psycho
yur jaws be all, who saw me fall, tha top blast u'll drop last, tha water cycle
man I dont know if it's just me but that didnt make sense. I see a bunch of multies and bunch of rhyming but I dont see what line 1 has to do with line 2 and the punch doesnt really go with the rest of the line as far as I can see.
1/5
sparks meet yur dark theatre, I call u bark eater, as u'll see slugs galore
u won't do me harm, I work axes like a tree farm, yur a casualty of tha war
much better, I understand where you're goin wit that and the punch was pretty decent
3/5
some made me threaten iceaxe will be a 187, u see I text tha truth nice
yur mind'll worry, cuz I am yur final jury, everything I type executes ice
hahaha that was decent, definitely the best bar of your verse everything worked out nice, the flow coulda been a lil tighter but yeah nice close
4/5
8/15
Axe
there's myths condenced in his mind that he's intense with his rhymes
i see no pith or sence in the lines so what's the intent with your time
ooh damn nice opener, real nice opener. nice multies and nice punch. I like the attack on him not making sense, gettin kinda personal about his style
4/5
I just see dead-letters and none of the sinner's breath
get your head-better it's just one of the winner's steps
After I read all the stuff about this it became a much better bar, I dont think it hits the same as the 1st but it's still solid
3/5
I be-dead-set my path's-whet-jets-at-vets by fast-step
he-tread-bled and blasts-threats-yet-that-set was a crap-test
Again after reading the explanation it was a much better bar but it was just solid because all the multies threw off the flow. I've always liked it a lil better when you get in some subliminal hits but your not so complex the reader can't get what you're saying about your opponent. But it was decent.
3/5
10/15
Ice takes it
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