Le Tunisien Vs Coleon

[Le Tunisien]

Aight will Go For 10 bars, 3 hit ko .....Here i go :

You a cock sucker so i just mock a fucker
am i bein real?or am i bein fake?
Bitch cant you feel,that u are a deamons mistake
in this World,you a call girl
you just a neard,cuz your mom ;i fucked her !
your sister is a bird,cuz she made me Earl =)
you probably never heard,but your mom makes burn
You mom is a Slave prostitute,i dont need a damn substitute
That Babe is cute,i smacked her to death we need a Fun tribute
So Mister ass kisser ,your sister i missed her even if i dissed Her

[Le Tunisien]

so u probably liked this drop better than the previous ones :P,im still a beginner but well i can fight xD

[Spyder]

i got coleon on this one bitches

[James R.]

Coleon took this by a landslide

Le Tunisien. This is what you need to do. 1st off when you're doing a battle you NEED to make sure the ends of your lines rhyme because it's damn hard to make a punch with other rhyme schemes/structures. You need to be a little more creative. The mom and sister stuff were kind of amusing, but you need to talk about more than just one thing to make a decent song and make decent punches. The flow was also really off in some parts, but thats because the rhyme scheme was so weird. Work on that and you'll be a lot better.

[Le Tunisien]

Coleon took this by a landslide

Le Tunisien. This is what you need to do. 1st off when you're doing a battle you NEED to make sure the ends of your lines rhyme because it's damn hard to make a punch with other rhyme schemes/structures. You need to be a little more creative. The mom and sister stuff were kind of amusing, but you need to talk about more than just one thing to make a decent song and make decent punches. The flow was also really off in some parts, but thats because the rhyme scheme was so weird. Work on that and you'll be a lot better.

thx for ur advice ok

[Slim Zaddy]

coleon get's my vote ,, but it was a good try by le tunisien , dont worry buddy about that ,, by practicing you will be there ,, keep battling, but the problem here is that there are no voters ..

why dont you people go and vote for me vs Slim313Shady .. make this thread alive again for god sake

[Almostlity]

Coleon, zup ya? Holla

vote for Coleon yeaaaaaaaaa

[MC Anonymous]

Coleon no need to break it down.

[gutawafang]

i vote for coleon.

[Slim Zaddy]

6th vote, this is over kill BITCHES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

okay ,, now re edit it bro .. write locked .. cuz this battle is over ,, gd luck in next battles . i think i'm gonna battle you ..

[Slim Zaddy]

I can't lock it, it's his, I'd exxcept but I know battle rap isn't my knack, you'll prob crush me again lol

ohh sooryy i did'nt notice that .. and nah i hve seen you improved alot in battles .. now you always win