FAME vs Gibbsy

[FAME]

12 lines, no flipping. And I don't care who posts first bro, just let me know.

[GibbzyTrShady]

checkin' in you drop first

[FAME]

Battling the great Gibbsy, difference between us is the shits in me
I can’t guarantee victory, but I will make you listen to me
Class Clown? I’ll make your ego simmer down
You’d be the talk of the town, detention for ya now
Still thinking I’m get there? But your still nowhere
I’ll leave you I swear, Like I can’t Breathe here!
Hold on taking over? You mean still taking orders?
As of right now your blocked by boulders, can’t flip em over
I’m out of shit to say to you, I’ll just let these words spray on you
My rhymes are something you can’t undo, your through
Don’t worry if I murder you, your album will do better dude
Now I’ve threw, now diss me would you?

Line 3: Name of his new Album
Line 5&6: I'm Get There & I Can't Breathe are two of his songs in the audio section
Line 7: His sig
Line 11: He has a album comming out

Your turn bro, good luck

BTW I edited the last line, because I wrote what I ment wrong lol

[GibbzyTrShady]

dayummm you came hard

OKayyy...
Im'a Spit Back With Clean Rap, Have Manners For A Chick /
Matter of fact, Fuck a battle how about you suck my dick/
I see Ya Quote; Elenor Roosevelt up In Tha Sig/
You oppose Equal Rights to? ; So I can cum on ya lips?/
You saying tha same lame shit/ As nimbus did/ Memories Ment Nuttin, fuck this //
Its Ya; time of the month Bitch///
Whats This?/im battleing a rapper with tits?;
So I Guess once i beat this chick, she guna be having my kids//
Make A list, of your dreams let me shatter them fast//
Bend Over Gurl Let My Words Be The Dick IN Your Ass//
Let Me Keep it to facts;// IM Tha Definition Of Fame/
Ya Couldnt Even Make it with Pussy, Ass Your Tits Or Your Name//

[FAME]

Haha! You had me laughing the whole time during that, nice
Okay people votee

[GibbzyTrShady]

VOTE !!!

[slimsoxshady]

Don't feel like breaking it down cuz i thought both verses were weak. My vote goes to FAME cuz i felt it was more consistent.

I vote FAME

Both you guys need work on multis and setting up punchlines. Your rhymes are too literal if ya know what i mean. It's like, "yeah ima do this and do that...." ...i don't see much creativity. That stuff comes with practice so keep tryina be creative.

[Element.]

i'm not going to brake it down but i can say FAME has my vote, his battle i think hit harder.

[slimsoxshady]

just felt like giving an example to let you know what i mean when i say be creative

FAME

As of right now your blocked by boulders, can’t flip em over
I’m out of shit to say to you, I’ll just let these words spray on you

Cmon homie, ur just wasting bars. The boulders line is ok but the next line is stupid. How can words spray? They have to spray like something...so think of something like garden hose, fire house, stuff like that. Here's something quick...i'll substitute a new first line as well

You can't "see" me with the flows, like treasured chests where Pirates go
My words will "spray" on you, i take the heat out like a fire hose

1st line: "can't see my skill" is a common sayin..."can't see" is like u "can't touch my skill." Then the worldplay is "see" cuz you can't actually see a treasured chest cuz its buried. And the Pirates bit makes it stand out imo, plus it rhymes with fire house in the next line

2nd line: again i take your "spray on you" bit and use some word play. Spray - spray water or spray bullets from a gun. So "take the heat out" is taking you gun out (heat is another slang for gun) and spraying bullets or taking the "heat" (as in taking a fire out) out like a fire house

Lol this actually turned out pretty dope, might have to recycle this sometime haha.


I can do a line for Gibsy if you want...

[classthe_king]

^^^^^^^Great advice

[FAME]

I appreciate advice whenever I can get it. So I really thank you for taking the time to write something to help me Still learning is very true for me. I just gotta keep practicing more and more. Thanks Slimsoxshady

[Spyder]

gotta go with Fame on this, its seems as if Gibbsy only used that fact the hes battling a girl
Fame used more things agasint him. more personals. also had more multies in there

not the best of battles but i see improvement in both of you

3-0 Fame is that KO?