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iceaxe187 vs DJ.Parker [VOTE NOW!!!!!!]
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iceaxe187 vs DJ.Parker [VOTE NOW!!!!!!]
by IceAxe » Mar 23rd, '07, 18:59
Last edited by IceAxe on Mar 23rd, '07, 20:10, edited 1 time in total.
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by IceAxe » Mar 23rd, '07, 19:10
My mission with this composition is eliminate the opposition
Im on a demolition expodition, I comission your desposition,
like a Roman patrician, make you dissappear like a magician
you can take a permanent intermission like a victim of the Inquisition
in the midst of the mist you'll get dismissed from this
submit to it, dont resist or I'll insist that you ceace to exist
*NOTE: the syllables in italics are more emphisized than the others
patrician- member of ruling class of the Roman empire
Inquisition- period of extreme prejudice against non-Christians ->millions killed
Im on a demolition expodition, I comission your desposition,
like a Roman patrician, make you dissappear like a magician
you can take a permanent intermission like a victim of the Inquisition
in the midst of the mist you'll get dismissed from this
submit to it, dont resist or I'll insist that you ceace to exist
*NOTE: the syllables in italics are more emphisized than the others
patrician- member of ruling class of the Roman empire
Inquisition- period of extreme prejudice against non-Christians ->millions killed
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by DJ.Parker » Mar 23rd, '07, 20:06
Nice drop 
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Shiver like a helpless crab without its shell, you dwell there's no relief for a mesh
Can't propel you yell cuz of the pain, now I smell the rotten beef flesh
My words are stronger than your fist, better try punching me when I take the pen
Tr blacklists you and persists me, thereby come out jackal in a lion's den
Tatoos on his boobs make issues cuz bar cruised on them like papoose
Try to refuse no you can't cuz you're abused, you're a bi? they amuse
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mesh- be in harmony
bar- Tr member
papoose- The artist
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Shiver like a helpless crab without its shell, you dwell there's no relief for a mesh
Can't propel you yell cuz of the pain, now I smell the rotten beef flesh
My words are stronger than your fist, better try punching me when I take the pen
Tr blacklists you and persists me, thereby come out jackal in a lion's den
Tatoos on his boobs make issues cuz bar cruised on them like papoose
Try to refuse no you can't cuz you're abused, you're a bi? they amuse
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mesh- be in harmony
bar- Tr member
papoose- The artist
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by °[~CHR!$~]° » Mar 23rd, '07, 20:14
flow iceaxe
structure iceaxe
ryhmes iceaxe
punches parker
complexity tie
other iceaxe
etc
vote:
iceaxe
structure iceaxe
ryhmes iceaxe
punches parker
complexity tie
other iceaxe
etc
vote:
iceaxe
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<- Dog!!!!
by Hadez » Mar 24th, '07, 09:57
FLOW: iceaxe
STRUCTURE: iceaxe
RHYMES: iceaxe
PUNCHES: tie
VOCAB: iceaxe
OTHER: tie
vote iceaxe
"like a victim of the Inquisition"-- that was ill, but (and this is just my personal opinion) if you took out the "the" it would still make sense and flow a little betta with the rest of the line. that's just how i read it though.
STRUCTURE: iceaxe
RHYMES: iceaxe
PUNCHES: tie
VOCAB: iceaxe
OTHER: tie
vote iceaxe
"like a victim of the Inquisition"-- that was ill, but (and this is just my personal opinion) if you took out the "the" it would still make sense and flow a little betta with the rest of the line. that's just how i read it though.
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