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Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 09:24

im not the type to get emotional/lovey-dovey but i just do what the beat says and i felt this beat to be a love type song... so it was a little more difficult to write being that i dont usually write like this so feedback is extremely appreciated... heres the beat...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HHpFQxKI ... re=related

Baby girl, its not very often that I trip or fall
The way u look, I love it when u strip and crawl
Over in my direction, u gave me love and affection
In ur eyes was my reflection, ur my number 1 selection
I was you protection, if there was ever disrespectin
When u needed something, I got it for you, no worries
When u needed favors, I would always go hurry
We started off, aint nothing but friends at the start
And than what started as lust, ends at the heart
And a couple months in, is when it finally hit me
Life is such a bitch, so ur love came up and bit me
And it was in that one moment, feelings rushed swiftly
I was feeling sortta low, but ur loving came to lift me
I didn’t know how to handle myself, I never felt this way
Saw each other every night, we talked by phone every day
Everything u needed, I was waitin right there for you
Doing all the little things, that’s how u knew I cared for u
But I guess the little things that always made u laugh and chuckle
weren’t enough, so in the end my heart had to crash and buckle
At first I was hurt, than I realized what im loosings gone
But im finally better now, I think that I am movin on
My heart is getting back together, but the bruisings strong
you do what you gotta do, cause finally im cruising on

Sometimes I sit, wonder what u are doing
Wonder what is on ur mind, what ur perusing
Wonder if ur doing good, if ur finally happy
I thought I was over u but ur love just traps me
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 8th, '10, 16:12

Man I really like you Edge but I also hate love songs that talk about Sex...this is something I picture Akon singing...but dope multis...I liked that at least
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby neversnooze » Jan 8th, '10, 17:08

how sweet awwww! the flow was good, but it was like an original piece. love topics have been done for years you know ,so it wasnt like "awh that was amazing". but it was good, i am guessing this piece is for your ex right
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 8th, '10, 17:52

^ awwwwwwwww. lmfao :laughing:


anyways, i thought this was a good piece, not as better as the couple of your last... but nice :wave:
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Element. » Jan 8th, '10, 18:34

Nice one edge :y:
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 18:42

thanks for the feed... this was a hard one to write because i dont like this type of song either... and it was sorta bout my ex but not really, cause i dont really care about her anymore lol i guess u could say past feelings for her haha
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Element. » Jan 8th, '10, 18:46

Edge wrote:thanks for the feed... this was a hard one to write because i dont like this type of song either... and it was sorta bout my ex but not really, cause i dont really care about her anymore lol i guess u could say past feelings for her haha

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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 8th, '10, 19:40

I dig it man, rapped it while playing that beat, which is fuckin sick, and it flowed really well for me, see it as a real chill track, I dont mind the love type rap stuff though, props homie :y: :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 19:53

Yah-hah wrote:I dig it man, rapped it while playing that beat, which is fuckin sick, and it flowed really well for me, see it as a real chill track, I dont mind the love type rap stuff though, props homie :y: :y:


thanks man... i like the love type rap too, its just that so many rappers do it wrong... they all do the same thing, make a couple lines about spoiling their girls cause theyre 'ballaz' and than throw akon or t-pain on the hook lol
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 8th, '10, 19:54

Yeah thats wat I alway say. Good shit though homie I dig the style
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 19:56

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah thats wat I alway say. Good shit though homie I dig the style


thanks man... hit me up for another colab when u got the time
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 8th, '10, 20:00

Alright I will. workin on the next gravedancer track when I finishe i'll hit you up man. Got some verses I been workin on so I'll hit you up sometime tonight
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 20:05

Yah-hah wrote:Alright I will. workin on the next gravedancer track when I finishe i'll hit you up man. Got some verses I been workin on so I'll hit you up sometime tonight


sounds good
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby GhanjaGod24 » Jan 8th, '10, 22:59

Edge, I see a lot of your raps and this one is not your best but it's def not the worst either keep up the good work :y:
"Side effects is similar to sugar pill
Who eva go next on the mic, he put a booger ew
And mad his exit on some calm shit
Begged em' on the regular for kegs of more Vomitspit."
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Re: Your Love Just Traps Me

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 23:02

GhanjaGod24 wrote:Edge, I see a lot of your raps and this one is not your best but it's def not the worst either keep up the good work :y:


thanks for the feed

our colab with bullet boy is coming soon lol
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