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Postby GhanjaGod24 » Jan 8th, '10, 23:30

This is just a quick rap to help me practice: Feel free to criticize the fuck out of it

Like the grim reaper, I devour your soul
Your on my naughty list, you get nothing but coal
I'm not a rapper but I could definitely write
In clear sight, I end the fight
No more games to be played, enemies get slayed
Mouth best be kept shut or you'll be my lamp shade
Not a murderer either, just slaughter you with words
I'm a bird droppin turds, to reach me is absurd
"Side effects is similar to sugar pill
Who eva go next on the mic, he put a booger ew
And mad his exit on some calm shit
Begged em' on the regular for kegs of more Vomitspit."
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Re: Practice

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 8th, '10, 23:41

naw i thought this was good, too short.. but good :flower:
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Re: Practice

Postby GhanjaGod24 » Jan 8th, '10, 23:47

bullet_boy46 wrote:naw i thought this was good, too short.. but good :flower:


Thanx Bullet, I'll def start making my raps longer, I was just trying to practice mutlis haha :happy:
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Postby Emadyville » Jan 9th, '10, 00:14

the flow wasn't that great, gotta learn to match syllables, rhymes were alright but simple, it was short, and i never like anyone using turd in a rhyme lol, keep writin :y:
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Re: Practice

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 9th, '10, 00:15

^basically your saying "dont use turd use shit" lol yea i agree keep at it.. i thought you were great in "straight outta staten" hey check it emady :smoking:
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Postby GhanjaGod24 » Jan 9th, '10, 00:38

Emadyville wrote:the flow wasn't that great, gotta learn to match syllables, rhymes were alright but simple, it was short, and i never like anyone using turd in a rhyme lol, keep writin :y:



Lmao :) I didn't want to use "turd" either but it seemed like the most simple thing to throw in at the time Thanks for the feed man :8)
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