Hail Hail

[Cookzee]

im not a king by definition, but i play it's part
i be spraying hard rhymes until the dark gets dark
some people say im smart like super saiyan sharp
i think that's saying something do i need a cape and all
im like superhero saving all you kids from shit
like bethoven and meatloaf you keep playing at your christmas's
and i be giving flips like fuck you, you are witnesses
believe if i could contract aids, then trust me i would give you it
man i couldn't give a shit, even if i tried
you'd tied me up, and put a gun between my eyes
told me hold to hold my tongue, i'd tell you i'd rather die
sacrifice my life to keep speaking my mind
coz it's a crime, to take it away in the first place
gets me more attention than a kid on his birthday
i'll never learn so before you go all church-ey
i wanna tell you summit, take it back to urbs mate!

[Emadyville]

i think you meant "day" in the second line, wasn't bad, rhymes were alright a little simple tho, and the flow wasn't bad, a few lines coulda used work, but i enjoyed readin it

[Yah-hah]

Super saiyan sharp line was dope no lie. Yeah some lines didnt seem like they fit, rhymes was good, especially the first prolly 1/3 of it was really dope. Good job cook

[Cookzee]

aight, if it's not to much could you copy the bits to me tht i need to re-write, i wanna get this verse perfect

[Yah-hah]

Yeah no prob give me a few seconds

[Yah-hah]

i think that's saying something do i need a cape and all
Doesnt really fit, I can see if you was rappin how you could make it rhyme but it looks different in text.

told me hold to hold my tongue, i'd tell you i'd rather die
Think you didnt mean to make two holds

Honestly its a solid verse bro. Just saying the beginning was really good I liked it. But the rhymes and such are where they need to be,