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Lettin Loose

Postby Spyder » Jan 10th, '10, 23:03

had a bunch of shit floating around, thought id get rid of it


My rhymes untouchable, cant come in contact with its cortex
Minds a vortex, youd get lost if I dropped some more-text
My vocal cords flex, and release lyrics so superfluous
You drowned in words you haven’t even heard-of-yet
Its murderous if you come into combat with the wrong raps
Waitin for you to blow up like you was wearin bombs strapped.
Its beyond that, try to get back at me is a catastrophe
Liftin you in the air like the Earth was missin gravity
I bash emcee’s who laugh at me, spittin wit the fast-flow
King without a castle, stoppin beef in its tracks like a lasso.
This “rap sheet” I got represents me living in bars
Skies gave me the sun/son cause I was missing the stars
Spitting the tar, hard like some freakish cig addict
Bitches sleep on me, I greet the sheets, lift your mattress
Get your address, its pointless for you to be packin gats
Im lashin back with acid tracks flippin you like acrobats.
I master crafts, leavin you all gunned down when I blast
Callin me the marathon sprinter how I run around the tracks.
I plead insane givin up like my mission is lost
Snapshots of my head so y’all could picture my thoughts
And the scriptures I jot, wanna see this brain of mine
Took and MRI and you still cant see my frame of mind.
I change the time, a succubus bustin-in through the back of your neck
Controllin your cranium if your try to grapple with text.
I battle the next, emcee to test me just beware the fellon
Leavin you crooked fuckin up your cerebellum.
If you all actin out I challenge to a match-and-joust
And made everybody tappin-out after one rappin-bout.
Im bustin these fools lettin loose got nothin to lose
The way I dismantle track call it substance abuse.
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 23:16

flippin you like acrobats.
:worship: :worship: nice drop
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Arrinef » Jan 10th, '10, 23:18

damn, that shit was mad dope

you are a force to be reckoned with :worship:
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Spyder » Jan 11th, '10, 00:05

:laughing: does that mean you slept on it Cole
"cause i come to your house flip your matress"


and thanks RF and Bullet :y:
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 11th, '10, 08:13

"vocal chords flex" sick one homie :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Element. » Jan 11th, '10, 08:19

awesome man.
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Spyder » Jan 11th, '10, 16:08

thanks guys,

any in depth feed would be loved

there is some great wordplay in this one i think :sweating:
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Element. » Jan 17th, '10, 23:34

Spyder wrote:thanks guys,

any in depth feed would be loved

there is some great wordplay in this one i think :sweating:

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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Spyder » Jan 18th, '10, 01:03

o yes thanks for the in depth feed guy :smoking:
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 18th, '10, 01:05

Spyder wrote:stoppin beef in its tracks like a lasso

Here's the crown. :king:

Haha, that was a dope line. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
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Re: Lettin Loose

Postby Spyder » Jan 18th, '10, 01:06

Relapse.LP wrote:
Spyder wrote:stoppin beef in its tracks like a lasso

Here's the crown. :king:

Haha, that was a dope line. :y:


thanks bro :y:
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