"Silence Of The Cemetery"

[i4ill]

This is my first Grunge-Rap song...I had about 50 songs back in the days but I took them all down off my music page as I'm developing a whole new style..
Listen and tell me what you think...I know my accent sucks that's why you gotta peep the lyrics as you listen..lol, I'm Arabian, English is not even my first language. So other than the lousy accent, what do you think?

Silence Of The Cemetery
Note: Lyrics and other info on the same page...

One more thing, if you have a SoundClick ID PLEASE Vote this song..I'm not sayin' yo should vote 5 stars (though it would be cool ) but vote whatever you think it deserves...and if you don't have Soundclick ID just play the song that will do...
thx in advance!

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

u defo need a better mic...i can see the hook being very nice but the quality holds back a lot
also your delivery is held back due quality...flow was shaky at times...u kind of missed to hit the drum/snare/the beat lol...
your accent isnt really that bad but yeah can be worked out a bit tho...
good lyrics what i could understand... nice introduction..there are lot worse

[B.A.D.]

the hook is great...
keep practicing your singing for hooks, you got the skill for that I can tell right away
try to work on your tone, and the way you handle the notes... plus the quality is a need... but you got a great skill for hooks man

as of the rapping, need to work on that flow, try the basic snare-hit so you can work from there

I like Grunge-Rap a lot, and I like the idea of the track

work on structure
fix the quality... its not that hard, you can see some youtube vids to help you out, soon youll get the hang of it

keep up the good work... I like your style... work it up man

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

oh dark i love dark.

your flow is off, hit the snares with you rhyme's to make it solid then youll progress to playing around more.


you got writing sorted very well written lyrics, your accent is find to me i understand all the words your delivery was good aswell for this type of track.


cant say i thought the singing was great but it didnt ruin the track, im not a singer so i cant comment.

better quality like they all said, try get the flow tighter, got great potential man keep it up

[i4ill]

I appreciate it guys thanx a lot for the constructive feedback, I'll work on those pieces of advive you mentioned...
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