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"Relased" Chorus & 2nd Verse

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"Relased" Chorus & 2nd Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 16th, '10, 05:48

(Chorus)
No longer trapped in a prison cell, (cuz my baby)
Released me from deep down in hell, (fuck you satan!)
I'm back so I have a long story to tell, (just know)
That everything is going good and well, (ha,ha!)
(Verse 2)
She gave me back sight, no longer see a black light,
Mess with my baby girl, and you better pack right,
Away, you don't want to miss your little wack flight?,
You do and i'll attack at night, leave you pale white,
She's the Monday to my 2sDay, hate on her you's gay,
Wanna be like her, strike, tear, and land on her puss-ay,
You's gay remember?, go stare at Mr. Wahlberg, okay?,
Touch the wrong places, I'll leave long traces, even days,
Of organs and blood, still think you all that and a stud?,
Defend her forever, cut or sever my arm for her, bud,
This girl's my lighting candle, always be fighting battles,
So she's all intact, fact is there is not pact if you rattles,
My cattle, i'll get my pointed knife, and end your pointless life,
Leave your jointless wife, jointless and with an ongoing strife,
To exhale, well, on to the next tale, I know I should be in sex jail,
I know it's called rehab, but we have such chemistry, just inhail,
More weed, or read a playboy whore magazine, all the same tale...

3rd verse too come later on... :smoking:
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Re: "Relased" Chorus & 2nd Verse

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 16th, '10, 06:03

Mmmm didn't like this one...didn't like the chorus or the hook...couple of the lines were hot but below par compared to the first verse....this one seemed forced...I do the same thing...the best thing to do when you think youre forcing a verse is work on another song and come back fresh...idk man lyrically...this was under the bar for you...I love the first verse though...
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Re: "Relased" Chorus & 2nd Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 16th, '10, 17:24

Fa-Q wrote:Mmmm didn't like this one...didn't like the chorus or the hook...couple of the lines were hot but below par compared to the first verse....this one seemed forced...I do the same thing...the best thing to do when you think youre forcing a verse is work on another song and come back fresh...idk man lyrically...this was under the bar for you...I love the first verse though...

thanks for ur constant feed in my songs. :y: appreaciate it and i do realize that some lines were forced. :sweating:
I'll re-make it later after I make 3rd verse. :8)
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Re: "Relased" Chorus & 2nd Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 16th, '10, 21:00

bump :whistle:
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