"Released" 3rd Verse

[2sDay]

Gotta love my pretty baby, she's such a tidy lady,
Without her I'd be really crazy, still stealin' Shady,
Posters and lyrics, being a poser with gimmicks,
A loner watching flicks, some stoner getting kicks,
Off of getting a boner watching chicks, lick dicks,
Like Limp Biskit, when they rode Gaga's disco sticks,
No more of that shit, lovely girl with not one flat tit,
Not a fat bitch, flirty and fit, she's my emergency kit,
Jumping around with those curvy hips, teaching me flips,
But I only see lips, still waiting for us to finally equips,
Ourselves for bedroom hour, in 2sDay's doom tower,
Where boom boom goes our room, just by the hour,
First it's sour, next bursts a flower, then immersed a shower,
Sex quite complex, girl tied and sexed, all undressed,
Loving this fun game, sun came and went, still not stressed,
She a hot mess, been through lots of tests, hasen't fessed,
Her love for me, I know she adores me, trust me we've kissed,

[Fa-Q]

Seemed a bit short but meh....I liked this verse...flow was easy and the rhyming scheme was different. Definately a step up from the second verse...yea thisll be dope, just revise the second verse...better hook and this'll be a dope drop...keep it up

[2sDay]

Seemed a bit short but meh....I liked this verse...flow was easy and the rhyming scheme was different. Definately a step up from the second verse...yea thisll be dope, just revise the second verse...better hook and this'll be a dope drop...keep it up

yea that's what Im a do right now.... re-make the 2nd verse and hook, revise all my verses, and then post the song as a whole.
again thanks for ur feed

[2sDay]

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