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Postby Edge » Jan 17th, '10, 21:23

Iv been writing a lot lately, but never over saturation
And it seems of late that, I’l never catch you hatin
And if you do, ul get jacked and busted, no masturbation
Im talking bout I rob u and than I smash ya face in
I crash while racin, three days later resurrect to existence
And at this direct instance I respect ya persistence
On the mic, I have no reason to suspect resistance
If I ever do than Im gunna object ya subsistence
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby Spyder » Jan 17th, '10, 21:26

wonder where i saw this :shifty:


its alright for me, i get the vibe that you tried to use a large vocab in which brings it down a bit
if that makes sense :sweating:

not bad
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby Edge » Jan 17th, '10, 22:39

Spyder wrote:wonder where i saw this :shifty:


its alright for me, i get the vibe that you tried to use a large vocab in which brings it down a bit
if that makes sense :sweating:

not bad


thanks man... i didnt put to much time into this one... u finish ur verse for that colab?
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby Spyder » Jan 18th, '10, 01:05

no im in fuckin block again

i did a shitty battle(on my part) with 2sday
and im in block again :shakehead:

i hate it
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby 2sDay » Jan 18th, '10, 01:21

Spyder wrote:no im in fuckin block again

i did a shitty battle(on my part) with 2sday
and im in block again :shakehead:

i hate it

we both did... :shakehead:
oh and btw ur verse was dope edge.....
could have had more multis, but easy flow, and i agree with spyder on the vocab shit....
overall good verse/lines.... :happy:
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby Edge » Jan 18th, '10, 07:32

thanks guys... and the verse u came up with, spyder, is sick... i like the hook too
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Re: quick 8 bars

Postby Element. » Jan 18th, '10, 08:27

Dope Edge your gettin there :worship:
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