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A positive school poem

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A positive school poem

Postby Slovinec » Jan 18th, '10, 06:35

Im suppose to read this infront of my class on tuesday so i was wondering if some of you hardcore rhymers could proof edit it?.. lol

look around these are your true gifts
the words that you speak, with your precious lips
drink a glass of water and feel refreshed
this is the reason god made you bones and flesh
just stop the drugs, drinking and whiling
focus on school, get good grades and start trying
get a job save up for college, acknowledge
one day youll look back astonished
that this guy actually helped you keep a promise
just keep ya chin up, knock down all your opponents
and search your box of components
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Re: A positive school poem

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 18th, '10, 06:37

real nice poem man.


rhymes dont matter that much in poems man so dont worry about it, it dont need to be complex or anything :y:
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Re: A positive school poem

Postby Slovinec » Jan 18th, '10, 06:38

,-,'-{Bar}-',-, wrote:real nice poem man.


rhymes dont matter that much in poems man so dont worry about it, it dont need to be complex or anything :y:



okay thanks buddy
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