Game Over

[Beckford]

Something I wrote when I was going through a rough time last year.

It's game over, the message has finally came over (x2)

Agitate me; and I'll get in your face like advertisement
None of you are hard enough to face the route that I went
Working at the corner shop; Nine to Five; just for my rent
Tired. I work solo; on my own I roll alone, I'm home alone
Writing lyrics on the walls and I sing alone like no one's home
I own my own zone; it's where I belong when I'm spacing out
The wallpaper's fading out and the trash is due for taking out
I reminisce my hazardous youth and try to; erase it out
But there's no way to take it out; it's a tumor in my brain
If i let it gain control it'll lead me to the brink again
succumbed to the drink again; I've been called immature
No one comes in my door, the doctor say's there ain't a cure.
I hit the floor. Every night I'm passed out by the urinal
If i died tomorrow - I'd be the only one at my funeral.

It's game over, the message has finally came over (x2)

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good...very generic... The "Struggle" has been done before...a lot...yours is of course unique but the idea is not...that being said as far as the writing...structure is great 10/10....vocab is there but not all of the way...you need try a bit more multis and maybe change up the rhyme scheme you know switch it up a bit. I liked this though good shit...oh if you need anymore help just PM me, Solace, Yah, Relapse, Zu, Class, or any of the other vets here...and I don't mean to offend you, just tryna ta help...welcome to the forum by the way

[Beckford]

Pretty good...very generic... The "Struggle" has been done before...a lot...yours is of course unique but the idea is not...that being said as far as the writing...structure is great 10/10....vocab is there but not all of the way...you need try a bit more multis and maybe change up the rhyme scheme you know switch it up a bit. I liked this though good shit...oh if you need anymore help just PM me, Solace, Yah, Relapse, Zu, Class, or any of the other vets here...and I don't mean to offend you, just tryna ta help...welcome to the forum by the way

Nice. I'll post another verse in a minute

[Edge]

i read "biggest mistake" and that one was definently hotter than this... this isnt bad but a bit basic... u had some nice multis in here tho... so keep at it... if u ever wanna do a colab or w/e hit me up

[Spyder]

sure faq dont mention me

[Spyder]

didnt mentio you either

scott

whose Most-Hated then