Key'd Up

[psu24]

New to the site, anyone in for text battles or w/e i'm down this is just some written rhymes. Any feedback would be appreciated.

The Officer Asked If I Had Bad Intentions. I Was Mad With Tension,
I Had To Mention I Jabbed A Friend In My Fuckin Last Dimension.
A Crass Complexion. All Started As A Kid When I Lacked Attention,
A Fact, Prevention Could Have Stopped My Hate From A Fast Extension.
I Have To End This But I Remember Holding Victims In A Vast Suspension,
I Apologize But These Raps Are The Only Way I'll Get Past Depression...
I'll Try To Teach Cats A Lesson That Its Impossible To Track Aggression,
Made With A Passive Hate, Two Katana's To Slash Ya Face.
So Fast, It'll Mash Ya Weight. Stash You In My Attic Space,
In Fact, Takin A Flaming Sword To Evaporate You To Ash With Grace...
I'm A Toxic Fiend. Selling Heroin For Ya Dope Vein That Will Cost Ya Green,
I'm Awfully Mean. I Passed Billy Mays Some Cocaine Mixed With Oxyclean!
Get The Stains Out After You Blow The Brains Out - Aint No Pain Now,
The Aroma Got Me In A Coma As My Damn Spinal Fluid Drains Out.
Blood Shot Eyes As I'm Grabbin Oxyclean. Oh And Also I Got Tide,
Force Feeding You Sodium Carbonate Mixed With Hydrogen Peroxide!
Ayo Waive That Finger. Cunt You Bring Hate That Lingers,
Ill Murder You With A Bee On Speed - With Eighteen Stingers!
The Illest To Use Caps Lock. Shit Why? Cause I Rap Hot,
Put Down The Crack Rock And Get Addicted To My Fat Cock.
Heres The Numbers. Situation Is Three Dudes, Me - Two Katanas,
One Second To Decide How Ima Prove My Rude Persona...
A Million Ways To Murder. But Only One Try To Test It,
One Slice At A 45 Degree Angle To Allow Their Insides To Exit.
Three Exposed Intestines. Two Dudes Fall The First,
Clutching Their Open Stomach As On The Wall It Squirts.
The Last One Looks Up - And Shit, Oddly Its You!
Smile!
One Overhead Slice From My Blades Will Only Leave Your Body In Two...

[Tranquil]

DOPE, is all i can say, DOPE

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good...I hate the cap on every first letter but I see you got pretty good multis....maybe work on the structure a bit but definately a good first drop

[Solace]

thought it was pretty dope dude welcome to the sitee

[Just Silver]

real nice dont expect much from "In Training" people but this is really nice

And just some info people are stuck on the structure shit and some people go to lengths that they wont even read it but stay active and remember stay different