My Final Goodbye

[classthe_king]

I didn't edit, or correct or make this better in any way. I just wrote how i felt and got everything off my chest.

This is the last bit of effort I'll ever put in your name
Each breathing second I think about you is pure pain
I've endured feigned nights you pretended to say
How you cared, I should have left but I intended to stay
Remember the day we were goona hang but you fell asleep
Now your tellin me you care after that, well that’s sweet
You failed to keep yourself up, how do you care after that
Fuck the sorrow and anger ive felt, your laughter smacks
Me harder than anything cause your completely satisfied
But im fuckin miserable, my life's been the saddest lie
I'm so mad it's like I wanna die, but im done with anger
You were the captain of my joy but you sunk the anchor
I'm the one in danger, I never dreamed I would cry
As I put my entire heart and soul into this last goodbye
Why would I give a fuck, it's been pretty tough to
Keep it like the old days, just know I'll always love you

[shadeonback]

I wish i could make songs like this for girls, i just know bitches

[Spyder]

you know i cant shit on a piece like this

piece was deep man, and i think the lack of your usual multies and sick rhymes shows that
you were alot more cencetrated on the concept

bravo

[classthe_king]

Haha thanks spyder

yeah, i wasnt trying to use any crazy multis at all but i do think ill go back and make them better cause after reading it they kind of sucked lol

[Spyder]

but this piece doesnt need said multies

[classthe_king]

yeah i know, but i have a weird attraction to amazing multis

[Spyder]

its crack

[Most-Hated]

Very nice piece my freind

The Imagery and overall emotion of this verse is great...With a good beat it could be wonderfull recorded..

I think the rhyming was simple in yet effectful, this type of song doesn't need crazy multi's and such...

nice job man

[Fa-Q]

Damn man...good emotion on this...I liked it even though it was probably tough for you to write...its cool that you shared it. Anyway if you could it would be cool if could finish it and make it a full song but don't add onto if you don't want to...good drop

[classthe_king]

Thanks alot

I do have a beat for it and will record it eventually, however long that takes. And it depends on how things go on whether i finish the song

[Solace]

That was fucking dope. I could feel that shit so much

[classthe_king]

Thanks alot solace