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Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 21st, '10, 23:21

worked along time with the wordplay/punches so feedback is very appreciated :y:

Im on Point like Johnson, Magic call me the sorcerer
Maestro I might blow if you fuckin with my orchestra,
Forcin ya to torture her, silent killer I just lay low
With horns ready to Ram out call me the scapegoat
I spray slow, so words can be heard and understood
You strike like lightning I make noise like thunder should.
My rhymes aint just sick, shit they come with disease
Not on some Incest cant no Brother Fuck with my piece.
Erupt when I speak, cause see when I spit next this text
Juicy get ya lips wet, so you can call my mic Blistex.
Only got Twenty Six friends, made the Alphabet n took it
Just kept hittin the J and left both my I’s Crooked.

Im asleep but still im living my dream insomniously
So much Whit all of Houston’s got a problem with me,
Honestly theres too many rappers here for the fame
If I left you Unidentified still wouldnt get Doe to ya name.
Frozen with chains, iced out actin like a pimp when
The only Baby that’s at your Crib is still an infant.
Its simplistic, everybody just needs to face the facts
Emcee’s try to Add up but got lost in the basic math,
My strainin back is at the wall, people always boxin me
Triangle choke from Square one tappin to my geometry.
Subconsciously I talk awkward but still make some sense
Climbin Walls while yall continue to take a-Fence (offence)

These lines bittersweet so best beware when you bite
Playin on the Radio, maybe I just fit the stereo-type.
Hit the snare with the mic, a beats in my credentials
Rhythms in my Brain, I always got the instru-Mentals.
I spit it gentle Callin rappers out like they on Speed dial
Makin these emcee’s Pay for all my Freestyles,
See while you go for the kill I fuck around with foreplay
They call me King cause you can have Beef your way.
Sure they act like battlin me is some kinda tragedy, well
Thats why I got you pussies Locked up like a Chastity belt
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jan 21st, '10, 23:26

I can't really say much except i enjoyed reading that bro :y:
nice job :worship:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 21st, '10, 23:27

:'(
ok

i thought they were good :tounge2:

guess ive come up with better in battles :unsure:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Ticalrecords » Jan 21st, '10, 23:37

i'm feeling it.

that last line w the Chastity belt made me laugh.
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 21st, '10, 23:55

thanks PK and Tical :worship:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Emadyville » Jan 22nd, '10, 00:36

I enjoyed it, some I really liked, some I didn't like the blistex line, but it was good, and yeah that chastity belt line made me laugh too :y:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 00:44

:D

thanks Emady
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 22nd, '10, 03:45

Hahah wow the wordplay in this iiiis amazing. Good drop Spy, good structure, multis, of course worplay, wasn't completely in love with the hook but meh...what do I know right...good drop
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 04:22

haha thanks faq, makes me sad about the future :(

and yea i need to work on my hooks :shakehead:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 22nd, '10, 05:07

Hey I know how you feel...I hate hooks too
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 05:10

Coleon im bored and would like to dispute that those are basic worplay, some perhaps but

kept hittin the J and left both my I's Crooked... cmon :sweating:

If I left you Unidentified still wouldnt get Doe to ya name.

Playin on the Radio, maybe I just fit the stereo-type.

Rhythms in my Brain, I always got the instru-Mentals. :sweating: :D
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 05:19

:laughing: ight

just bored,cant sleep you know how it is :shakehead:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 05:23

Coleon wrote:
Spyder wrote::laughing: ight

just bored,cant sleep you know how it is :shakehead:


Fowl mouth cock sucker


scuse me :confusion:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby gutawafang » Jan 22nd, '10, 05:57

Crazy motherfucking punches Spyder. I loved it! :worship:
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Re: Playin With Words (please feed)

Postby Spyder » Jan 22nd, '10, 06:00

thank you guta :worship:

coleon whered you go off to :shifty:
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