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Dear You

Postby Strictt Ame » Jan 23rd, '10, 04:55

Dear You,


Ive been seeing you seeing me for the longest time
When we make eye contact I feel the strongest vibe
You flashed a smile, and I just shook n grinned
Is this love at first sight or should I look again
Love is a drug n lust is a must, Im hooked again
On to the next chapter, don’t want this book to end
Some said you were a prude, at least I was told that
Im studying your body, curves like a road map
How did God mold that? Takin everything I got to hold back
I see ya boyfriend and I wanna put a beatin on that pussy
Then take ya back home, start beatin on ya pussy
Pardon the lingo, know you how these things go
I want to see ya drop it to the floor, makin it swing low
But you got champagne dreams, I only got Grey Goose
I know your just an object the way he portrays you
He wont stay true, your only gonna be sick and then cry
When you come to find out hes got a chick on the side
I can see you covering up pain, and you scared to go
But baby, Im not afraid to go places he scared to go
Wet ya body with saliva, yes you better believe it
And if that cats clean, I’ll become a Korean
Now I may not have the bank account or makin the stacks
But what I can offer you is ten times greater than that
When ya get a flat tire, then I’ll be your ride
You be my Bonnie, and I’ll be your Clyde
It wont be a fairy tale, scenic views livin in France
Although you’ll still be a queen, just give it a chance


Sincerely,
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Re: Dear You

Postby Emadyville » Jan 23rd, '10, 05:13

I really liked this, I feel like I've heard a song with this kinda concept before, doesn't really matter tho. I thought the beatin on the pussy line was outta place or just kinda wrong to say in something like this, but when you went into pardon the lingo I thought it worked, so that was good, good ending too :y:
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Re: Dear You

Postby Strictt Ame » Jan 23rd, '10, 05:45

Yeh I threw a couple twists into it..but at some point every man has those thoughts randomly..it aint all romance n shit..

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Re: Dear You

Postby Emadyville » Jan 23rd, '10, 05:45

Strictt Ame wrote:Yeh I threw a couple twists into it..but at some point every man has those thoughts randomly..it aint all romance n shit..

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o fuck yeah i agree, it just kinda took me by surprise wit how you started, but like i said how you worded it afterwards fit perfect
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