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Hate but I Love

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Hate but I Love

Postby FAME » Jan 23rd, '10, 06:37

It eats me alive, deep down to my soul
My parents, my brother, and I’m losing control
Sick and tired of fights for no reasons
Every little things seem like an acts of treasons
I might need an inhaler, I’m barely breathing
I can feel regret in my lungs, and I am wheezing
Regret for not being able to help at all
My lung is about to collapse, it’s about to fall
I can feel my heartbeat start to intensify
Feeling like my soul is about to die
I have the urge to make everything okay
Make sure every bill just gets paid
To stop the yelling and screaming
Inside voices are all that I’m meaning

Hold your horses
I’m giving no remorses
Please consider the following
Because we are now wallowing
I am gasping for air
It seems like you just don’t care
Drowning in a sea of shit
And I can’t fix any of it

No, you know what? I’m tired of everything
Tired of being your puppet as you pull the string
It’s not my job nor my responsibility
To get the finances in a stability
I’m under enough shit as it is, Krum to Flo Mo
Everyday is a waste, and it feels like it’s in slow mo
Sometimes not even getting home to nine
And you expect my grades for be in the high
Fucking sorry I didn’t match your eighty-five
I’m not blowing this stuff, but lately I’ve
Had no reason or energy, to try and make it better
Might as well throw my report card into a shedder
And dump college in there as well, unless it’s community
You know what? Fuck it, you might as well shoot at me

Hold your horses
I’m giving no remorses
Please consider the following
Because we are now wallowing
I am gasping for air
It seems like you just don’t care
Drowning in a sea of shit
And I can’t fix any of it

Sometimes I’m sorry for the things that I say
And the way that my family is portrayed
But they are a lot worse than they appear
In others words they are a pain in the rear
But I love them, with all my heart and soul
But then again, we don’t have the money to bowl
Plus I hate, but what can I say its
Just the way my family gets through the day’s shit
As much as I wanna kill them sometimes
To everyone I would say that they are all mine
I’m so glad I have a home, a place to feel safe
Even though sometimes I feel like an inmate
Even though I don’t agree with them on many things
I wouldn’t trade them for anything

Hold your horses
I’m giving no remorses
Please consider the following
Because we are now wallowing
I am gasping for air
It seems like you just don’t care
Drowning in a sea of shit
And I don’t wanna fix any of it


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Re: Hate but I Love

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 23rd, '10, 07:18

Faaaaame...what's up girly...I like this piece...lil tip tho...beats are structured so that its four lines at a time so usually you have couplets or four bars relating to the same thing. And in the first 6 lines you cut that in half by putting the four lines that rhyme second after the couplet so it would split the beat...does that make sense...whatever do what chu want:)...I like this song though great emotion...keep it up:)
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Re: Hate but I Love

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 23rd, '10, 19:15

idk wat that guy is talking about :whistle: but lol it was dope. I like how your lines are easy to read and flow with. Really diggin your pieces lately ma :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


Nundea Mekeze comin soon May 4th
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Re: Hate but I Love

Postby Solace » Jan 23rd, '10, 20:34

Thought it was pretty dope myself as Yah-Hah did. Keep it up, havent checked ya writtens in a while so when compared to the last I read keep up the good progress.
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