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2sDay- Ignorance

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2sDay- Ignorance

Postby 2sDay » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:16

Wrote this to a beat...... gonna make it audio :flower:

Livin' in a corrupted world, wanna erupt and hurl,
Illuminati looming over there, with an adopted girl,
To brainwash, in vain to bash on them trash,
But the fucking New World Order, still gains cash
Ignorance covers society, but it bothers my entity,
That Illuminati just comes and smothers my city,
God, there's shitty brothers fillin' our once tidy,
Home up in the M.I.A, now all is just gay,
My sole motivation decays, as this nation plays,
With Illuminati's vacation stays, a preacher prays,
But no changes are even laid, not one teacher lays,
The truth on the table, but they're still leavin' paid,
Life is one big fake fable, we're all gettin' played,
Nothing will make me stable, life needs a fake label,
Next to the lake is a cable, bake myself while I'm able,


2nd Verse & Chorus Coming Up!
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Re: 2sDay- Ignorance

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:20

I like this...good multis and structure but quit releasing your song verse by verse...
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Re: 2sDay- Ignorance

Postby 2sDay » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:23

Fa-Q wrote:I like this...good multis and structure but quit releasing your song verse by verse...

im just too lazy to think of all of it right now......
my mind is too lazy to think at the moment :sweating:

but i'll do that next time :smoking:
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Re: 2sDay- Ignorance

Postby 2sDay » Jan 24th, '10, 01:50

what the fuck?! no feed? :shakehead:
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Re: 2sDay- Ignorance

Postby AliJack » Jan 24th, '10, 11:34

its aight... i dont really consider those full multies though.. and it just doesnt really all add up, okay, illuminati.. adopted girl? and you need to incorporate wordplay and punches.. good for a 13 year old though..good vocab ....my raps at that age sounded like nursery rhyme flows. like equal syllables throughout, wack shit.. lol
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Re: 2sDay- Ignorance

Postby 2sDay » Jan 25th, '10, 04:00

thx alijack :D
bump :whistle:
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