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Social Dance

Postby mcZu » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:17

With the pen I’m being real and I block my lie ability
Doesn’t matter how you look at it, being real is seen as a liability
Fronting has more profitability, even a prophet ability
Would be pushed aside, just to pull profit a bit near thee
Integrity lacking human beings, the torch is what I lit
I can’t sleep, insomnia is in some areas fighting each eyelid
Why fit in, I’m not like them, I bid them farewell
I’m a stand out, I don’t like them, it aint a bit fair.. well
..my art is strictly from the heart, it’s hand made
I did it from the start, I issue my own code of conduct, I’m not a handmaid
It starts with a pen which I grab then my hand shakes
I introduce myself to the beat, my words ask for a handshake
You got a hard head, said my mother when I fell as a kid
Maybe that’s why I’m hardheaded, what I felt as a kid
Was different from the others, I even fell for this girl, I kid..
She fell for me, was too smart for my age I was like.. wise
It’s 10 years later, and guess what, I still feel likewise
All I need is my brain, heart and soul, Zu’s net works
I can be the unsocial type who’s social, just ask my networks
I can protect myself, don’t need no high social security number
I get to work each time I write, no need for a social security number
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

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Re: Social Dance

Postby Spyder » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:23

i like the insomnia line :shifty:

i like the piece bro BUT

i noticed this with anothre one of yours your rhyming things, with other things exatly like them

[example]
lie ability/ liability
like.. wise/likewise
net works/ networks
farewell/fair well
hand shakes/ hand shakes

and then your rhyming with the same word
social security number
as a kid/ kid

idk just not a fan of that :sweating:
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Re: Social Dance

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 23rd, '10, 22:24

BEginning was like the last song rhyme scheme I like it. Good shit as always though man really gettin it on lock :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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