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Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

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Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Solace » Jan 23rd, '10, 18:19

[Verse]
It's the way I'm criticized, now I'm driven by stares,
And right now I need the oxygen, but I ain't living by air,
I reflect upon the past, my pain's abysmal, I'm scared,
Success is in the cup, and I ain't sipped on my share,
Now I'm always occupied, doing the things that I hate,
Through these experiences, I realize life isn't quite great,
I never write anymore, I'm always getting stressed out,
Achieving is my goal, though my mind will stress "How?",
And having happiness is probably my best doubt,
Didn't choose the best route and so I'm messed now,
Holding my chest, wow, off and on the stage man,
A different person, lot of lost thoughts of rage canned,
Pencil hits the paper, attempting to compose art,
I keep on jotting, yet obviously there's just no spark,
This corner it is so dark, really I need me a light,
Before this darkness hardens and starts to eat me alive.

[Chorus]
Read my drops, then you fantasize to hear it,
Yet you don't know what's wrapped inside the lyrics,
Read between the lines, hatred, love, suicide,
The mirror portrays nothing but my fluid eyes,
There's a voice speaking to me back in my mind,
Fuck friends, at least this voice asks if I'm fine,
Well I'm not, and though I pretend all is well,
You'd never expect what's behind this solid shell.
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby classthe_king » Jan 23rd, '10, 18:20

I already told you my opinion on this. I love it :worship:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Solace » Jan 24th, '10, 00:21

Thank you for reading. :y:
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Spyder » Jan 24th, '10, 00:25

i like this bro, love the emotion in it and the multies are subtle yet good
which is what they should be :y:

wish it could be longer but if u were ina block thats that

hook was nice, but a little long for a hook imo :sweating:

nice track solace
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Solace » Jan 24th, '10, 00:29

thanks bro
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby embm » Jan 24th, '10, 01:27

gr8 shit :y:
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 24th, '10, 02:32

embm wrote:gr8 shit :y:

Kellogg's. :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Solace » Jan 24th, '10, 02:36

Relapse.LP wrote:
embm wrote:gr8 shit :y:

Kellogg's. :shifty:

LMAO :laughing:

Thanks embm
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Edge » Jan 24th, '10, 21:49

good shit man :y:
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: Stressed (Yes I'm back...Sorta?)

Postby Solace » Jan 25th, '10, 00:47

Coleon wrote:the chorus is kinda like an ending bridge really (if that's allowed lol)

I can definitely see this recorded

these are the drops you're best at, you're a really emotive guy

keep it up Omar :b:

Thanks man.. :worship:

thanks for reading it too Edge :y: glad you liked it
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