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A Killer's Dream

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A Killer's Dream

Postby AOBrien09 » Jan 25th, '10, 00:41

pyscho mass murderer, ripping you apart limb by limb,
I stalk you when the lights are dim, my art is sin,
Am the one all clothed in black, with a disguised face,
a devine taste, a find the body like a cannibal, why the haste,
I'l only catch you up, and then watch your blood drip,
when i've massacred your flesh like a butcher no shit,
so pass the axe am about to crack some bones,
on the attack and it's night time so am back on me throne,
cause am king of killing, and am on a roll,
a another soul gone and am I've just started hoe,
departed throat, no neck connected to the head,
so go ahead, an check for a damn finger print,
won't find no finger print, so am I innocent ?
haha fuck no, am just a world class sick assassin,
can a stick something in that hole in ya ass, sick of asking ?,
haha a never ask a just trap'em, to me it's not even a task an,
it's practice, how dare you ask is to spare ya life bastard,
open my eyes thank god it's all a dream, oh damn
why is their blood on my finger's, on both hands /


read and feed if you can :p though this was done quickly :sweating:
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 25th, '10, 05:27

Damn man shit is pretty ill. I wish other people didnt sleep on you so much cause your dope man no lie. I always like these concepts so props man :y:
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby gutawafang » Jan 25th, '10, 08:36

Crazy shit man. For a minute I thought it's a bot posting because of the font color. :sweating:

Punches and vocab are good. keep it up man. :y:
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby Edge » Jan 27th, '10, 07:14

good shit my man :y:
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby preest » Jan 27th, '10, 13:21

nice, the only thing I didnt like was "I'm the king of killing" I thought that sounded a little corny but the whole piece was crazy nice man, keep writing!!!
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby AOBrien09 » Jan 27th, '10, 13:36

Thnks for the feed everyone :flower:
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby Spyder » Jan 27th, '10, 20:50

nice lille drop bro
in the beginning you didnt use the same amount of syllables in your mutlies
but u fixed it after that so

not bad bro :y:
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Re: A Killer's Dream

Postby Strictt Ame » Jan 27th, '10, 23:14

Solid drop, creativity and imagery were good..the topic concept has been done too much I think but the read was good..keep droppin
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