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Postby lazyhazycrazydavey » Jan 28th, '10, 01:37

I'm sick of all these rat bastard spammers
I'd like to make half of em cadavers
ram a sledge hammer
in the back of the head or slap them
with a 7 n a half foot ladder
shatter thier bones
n shank em till I'm puncturin thier bladder
watch thier blood splatter
watch thier chitter chatter
turn into barely a spatter
point is
that shit got annoyin
maybe it's overactive condroidins
no matter I'll kill 'em quicker
than rattle snake poison
leave 'em in a coniption fit
on the internet
like these bitches just did
a bit too much crystal meth
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby Just Silver » Jan 28th, '10, 01:45

the title kills this piece

and tbh some lines didnt rhyme but looked like u thought they did

no hate just lookin out for you guy :smoking:

im high so if this sounds like im an asshole im not usually

practice makes better :happy:
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby lazyhazycrazydavey » Jan 28th, '10, 01:49

no worries yo...thanx...I can do way better...just spit somethin quick to antagonize...this ain't like the other Eminem.com...people here have skill...I feel like I'm home... :D
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Postby Just Silver » Jan 28th, '10, 02:07

lazyhazycrazydavey wrote:no worries yo...thanx...I can do way better...just spit somethin quick to antagonize...this ain't like the other Eminem.com...people here have skill...I feel like I'm home... :D

yea id like to see some more Improve is the way to go
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Postby Emadyville » Jan 28th, '10, 03:20

What silver said, keep workin on the writing :y:
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Postby lazyhazycrazydavey » Jan 28th, '10, 03:25

hey I'm just came from Eminem.com...being nice is gonna take some time... :zipped:
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby Strictt Ame » Jan 28th, '10, 03:36

Excuse^..So a website has such an influence on you it can chnage how you are as a person..

Pretty weak drop..with the title I was expecting some murderous shit..keep writing..
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby Spyder » Jan 28th, '10, 03:55

Coleon wrote:If you can't say anything nice, then don't say anything at all

why I'm not feeding^

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Postby Solace » Jan 28th, '10, 04:06

Coleon wrote:If you can't say anything nice, then don't say anything at all

why I'm not feeding^

What he said.
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby lazyhazycrazydavey » Jan 28th, '10, 04:24

you all talk big game...spit it...
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Postby classthe_king » Jan 28th, '10, 04:39

Check there posts :laughing:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby Strictt Ame » Jan 28th, '10, 04:41

I'll gladly kick a quick flow, shit bro - you a lame, n dude
I spit 16s for the sickest emcees - so this dont pertain to you
Lyrics stunning and punches ready to abuse and daze ya
So even little 'Chinese kids' think you need 'euthanasia' [youth in Asia]
See - Im a 4 bar killer anything you droppin dont phase me, stop it
I dont need to be on the 'wild frontier' to see that 'Daveys Crockshit' [Crockett]
Will never give a shit if, on another site you were hype or dope
Cuz here, you couldnt 'take Ame' with a fuckin 'snipers scope'


Is that enough talk for ya?..lol
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Postby gutawafang » Jan 28th, '10, 04:55

^LMAO!

Ok, I think you need to work on the multis Davey. And your structure. ;)
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Postby Edge » Jan 28th, '10, 07:57

Strictt Ame wrote:I'll gladly kick a quick flow, shit bro - you a lame, n dude
I spit 16s for the sickest emcees - so this dont pertain to you
Lyrics stunning and punches ready to abuse and daze ya
So even little 'Chinese kids' think you need 'euthanasia' [youth in Asia]
See - Im a 4 bar killer anything you droppin dont phase me, stop it
I dont need to be on the 'wild frontier' to see that 'Daveys Crockshit' [Crockett]
Will never give a shit if, on another site you were hype or dope
Cuz here, you couldnt 'take Ame' with a fuckin 'snipers scope'


Is that enough talk for ya?..lol


nice lol
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: I'm new here but I'll still kick some ass

Postby lazyhazycrazydavey » Jan 28th, '10, 16:19

what the fuck, you smokin coke?
my rhymes'll leave ya comatose
like an overdose
strictt you must be jokin yo
thinkin you shit's more than just broken flow
keep smokin the rope of smokin Joe
I'm a master at the rope a dope
I don't leave abrasions
like strangulation
it's decapitation
use Jason's chainsaw
so theres no chance for coagulation
just amputation after amputation
till it starts to look like jap animation
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