fuck crazy davey

[Edge]

If I ever see crazy dave in public, I swear I’ll punch him
He thinks hes hot, with his lines short as a munchkin
Hes the stubborn newbie, not taking friendly advice
So now I gotta dust off the shottie and take his family’s lives
This pussys afraid to put his location on his profile
Cause I will kill him at his show while, this hoe smiles
He keeps on thinking hes the greatest thing since sliced bread
Hes dealing with a killers heart and Jesus Christ’s head
I swear you could try to crucify me, but ur better off to pacify me
Cause I will kill you slyly, ya mothers crying, cause you had to try me
And this is just my simple rhyming, ur no threat to bring the heat
This mother fucken pussy should back down and sing defeat
In all actuality, chances are, deep down you don’t wanna battle me
Thinking that you could rattle me, is nothing but a big fallacy

[Yah-hah]

nice yeah I been seein that cat

[Edge]

part two on the way

[Spyder]

lacked on hard punches and personals which are the basis of a diss

[lazyhazycrazydavey]

I ain't heard no fat lady
you wanna blast davey
that's crazy
country boy that'll fuck you up
I might as well battle Brad Paisley
'best thing since sliced bread'
your lines are so fresh
ur dopeless, hopeless
but you think that your Mos-Def
90% on this site have the same style
afraid to be urselves, just copy 8 mile
that'll work, then they'll think I'm a brain child
meanwhile, they know you suck n put on a fake smile

[Edge]

lacked on hard punches and personals which are the basis of a diss

well hes new, and has no information on his profile or any posts besides like 2-3 threads so idk how personal i could get

maybe this is better

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=78059

[Edge]

I ain't heard no fat lady
you wanna blast davey
that's crazy
country boy that'll fuck you up
I might as well battle Brad Paisley
'best thing since sliced bread'
your lines are so fresh
ur dopeless, hopeless
but you think that your Mos-Def
90% on this site have the same style
afraid to be urselves, just copy 8 mile
that'll work, then they'll think I'm a brain child
meanwhile, they know you suck n put on a fake smile

mad good diss bro

[Spyder]

always find personals son


and Dave dont respond with raps in threads,
make a new thread

[classthe_king]

lacked on hard punches and personals which are the basis of a diss

well hes new, and has no information on his profile or any posts besides like 2-3 threads so idk how personal i could get

maybe this is better

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=78059

Exactly, you don't have enough personals on him, so don't diss him

[gutawafang]

Crazy Dave is actually the shopkeeper in the game Plants vs Zombies. LMAO.

[Yah-hah]

Yeah kinda thinkin the same here. Yo spydie get on msn!! yeah is a bit hard without any posts lol

[Element.]

lacked on hard punches and personals which are the basis of a diss

well hes new, and has no information on his profile or any posts besides like 2-3 threads so idk how personal i could get

maybe this is better

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=78059

Read all his posts like the rhymes he has done and turn it agenst him or what ever.

[B.A.D.]

If I ever see crazy dave in public, I swear I’ll punch him

very very very bad opening line... and punchline...

I think many people in here dont understand the way of using mutlis and that stuff... some of you all are forcing it too much... dont... if you going to do complex... go complex all the way not halfway through.

now to feed this.
first, your structure is good, you have a good idea of how its set up. the shceme is also nice... you kept the flow on most of the verse, so it works great. to be a diss, its not good at all, but as a punchline keystyle its not close to bad, its actually good, but you do need to step up the vocab a bit. cuz your calling him names, instead of dissing.
I like how you closed it with the fallacy line.

.. keep it up

[Edge]

If I ever see crazy dave in public, I swear I’ll punch him

very very very bad opening line... and punchline...

I think many people in here dont understand the way of using mutlis and that stuff... some of you all are forcing it too much... dont... if you going to do complex... go complex all the way not halfway through.

now to feed this.
first, your structure is good, you have a good idea of how its set up. the shceme is also nice... you kept the flow on most of the verse, so it works great. to be a diss, its not good at all, but as a punchline keystyle its not close to bad, its actually good, but you do need to step up the vocab a bit. cuz your calling him names, instead of dissing.
I like how you closed it with the fallacy line.

.. keep it up

thanks man... this definently isnt my better stuff