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The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby peoplz_champ » Jan 29th, '10, 02:33

I could write without a beat.
This is like a special treat for the beginners,
This is like a bee stinger except this shit doesn't sting, cause I'm just a beginner.
Learning some new shit from my trainer.
One Day I hope to have a daughter who could make my life worth wild,
I know she will just be a child but still I would be the happiest father in all of SD,
People say I need to extend my vocabulary, shit, I'm just trying to be me,
Nobody else, cause If I follow those footsteps it will probably lead me to hell.



How about dis one :whistle:
I got mushrooms, I got acid, I got tabs and aspirin tablets
I'm your brother when you need, some good weed to set you free
You know me, I'm your friend, when you need a minithin
(I'm Slim Shady..) I'm Shady!!
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby Spyder » Jan 29th, '10, 02:48

kid...


are u battling someone no, no your not

i dont see an opponent do you?

this goes in the CW i know u know where that is

if u wanna battle call somebody out in the Call Out thread :y:
this is an unofficial wanrning, do it agian sajn will rape u
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby gutawafang » Jan 29th, '10, 02:51

Structure not good. Hard to flow though I know where the rhymes lie int his one. Make it longer and make it more original. Ok, your sudden switch of story line at the fifth line is not good. Just my 2 cents.
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby yoyoboy619 » Jan 30th, '10, 01:58

Spyder wrote:kid...


are u battling someone no, no your not

i dont see an opponent do you?

this goes in the CW i know u know where that is

if u wanna battle call somebody out in the Call Out thread :y:
this is an unofficial wanrning, do it agian sajn will rape u
yeah, you make threats over the net, but let's c if u could say it to my face, if u have the courage to ill give you my address and we could get it on like donky kong, I don't play that kid shit, I'm not here to fuck around if u wanna act like a dick about something, go suck the managers balls or something alright homie ?.






Another note I ain't a kid iim a grown ass man
There once was a saying that I used to say
Back in the day when I met Dre
I used to sit and goof on the phone with, my friend Proof
That if I went gold, I’d go right through the roof
He said what If you went platinum, I’d just laugh at him
That’s not happening, that I can’t fathom
Eighty something million records worldwide,
Later I’m living in a house with a fucking elevator
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby Spyder » Jan 30th, '10, 02:13

:laughing: your taking an internet comment seriously...cute
you look retarded saying things like that so keep it shut :y:
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby yoyoboy619 » Jan 30th, '10, 02:23

Spyder wrote::laughing: your taking an internet comment seriously...cute
you look retarded saying things like that so keep it shut :y:



Nah, I won't keep it shut , cause how m I suppose to lick your moms pussy ?
There once was a saying that I used to say
Back in the day when I met Dre
I used to sit and goof on the phone with, my friend Proof
That if I went gold, I’d go right through the roof
He said what If you went platinum, I’d just laugh at him
That’s not happening, that I can’t fathom
Eighty something million records worldwide,
Later I’m living in a house with a fucking elevator
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby Spyder » Jan 30th, '10, 02:32

well u got me there, u win your god

lets not spam his thread
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby yoyoboy619 » Jan 30th, '10, 02:44

Ah, so the mom is thre key, alright, cya l8r mommas boy
There once was a saying that I used to say
Back in the day when I met Dre
I used to sit and goof on the phone with, my friend Proof
That if I went gold, I’d go right through the roof
He said what If you went platinum, I’d just laugh at him
That’s not happening, that I can’t fathom
Eighty something million records worldwide,
Later I’m living in a house with a fucking elevator
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 30th, '10, 07:32

:confusion: huh bro why you trippin?
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby B.A.D. » Jan 30th, '10, 10:00

peoplz_champ = yoyoboy619 ???? :confusion:
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 30th, '10, 11:36

be cockier lol not bad though keep it up :y:
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby yoyoboy619 » Jan 30th, '10, 19:27

Big Ax-D wrote:peoplz_champ = yoyoboy619 ???? :confusion:



Yep, both of them people are me.
There once was a saying that I used to say
Back in the day when I met Dre
I used to sit and goof on the phone with, my friend Proof
That if I went gold, I’d go right through the roof
He said what If you went platinum, I’d just laugh at him
That’s not happening, that I can’t fathom
Eighty something million records worldwide,
Later I’m living in a house with a fucking elevator
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Re: The Person Who Battles Without Fingers

Postby SajN » Jan 30th, '10, 19:30

yoyoboy619 wrote:
Big Ax-D wrote:peoplz_champ = yoyoboy619 ???? :confusion:



Yep, both of them people are me.

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