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Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

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Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

Postby Enimee » Jan 29th, '10, 11:14

this mite flow wierd cuz of structure buutttt tell me what ya think


rhymes intertwined inside the mind of einstein
im on my shit and forever i will be nine times
the rapper you assumed or even expected from me
cause i mite be in the book but im on another sheet
mite be on the block but im on another street
mite be in the booth but im on another beat
while these other cats dont appeal there all parallel
try writin a track thats actually real, with some awe and some skill
cause often i feel, like yall aint even tryin
so when comin at me you gonna need to upgrade from nursery rhymin
cause firstly yur lyin, your beat aint heat its trash
and we may be on the same track, but it aint collab
to beat me? your gonna need mo-cash
equal to that of tryna purchase and original MJ throwback
matter of fact youll need a mili and a half
mixed with gillie and his raps
and inventions from hidden levels inside dexters lab
doc. carters swag, wayne carters dad
and immature dollars like what nicki minaj has
so you ludachris rappers mite wanna just get the fuck back
before i self destruct, yup, call me fifty cent
for followin jay's blueprint, this is what you get
and F in college unless your name is mr. west
fuck makin it rain im another form of precipitation
chillen in stephen kings mist, com see what is waitin
a horrible monster devised inside hitchcocks mind
a robot you can only see with isaac asimovs ....I(eye)
lyrically define words translated from lost languages
youll need a clothing line funded by the simmons if you wanna hang with us
and if you wanna bang with us? well its too dangerous
you'll need t-rex teeth, the worlds toughest street
combined with all the super powers from the justice league
shit you could be a trojan and still you couldnt fuck with me
and umm lets see, youll need rap city's livest man
mixed with the fiercest tiger from the lionzden
and still i wudnt try it then
cause to me yall is vegetables and guess who's dietin
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Re: Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 29th, '10, 19:56

This is my favorite in the series easy. The beginning was ill with the einstein line. Really good shit bro I liked it alot :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

Postby Enimee » Jan 29th, '10, 23:43

thanks really appreciate the feedback its my favorite too kinda tried to go all out with this one
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Re: Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 29th, '10, 23:48

Yeah man when I did a series called FUCK THE WORLD, my 4th was the best lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Cardboard Diaries Pt. 4

Postby Enimee » Jan 29th, '10, 23:54

i actually think my next ones gonna be just as good if not better...wait nd see "__"
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Good,Cool!

Postby yypl1986 » Jan 31st, '10, 02:52

Good article, also has studied the new thing




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