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just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby preest » Jan 25th, '10, 18:54

this is just something that I wrote a couplke weeks ago and aint sure if its getting used for anything, let me know what you all think - thanks people

Which Manson is inspiring, Charles or fucking Marilyn?
Piles of coke and heroin, walk miles, cos’ I’m burying
The severed head of Evelyn, man release the devil and
She thought at the beginning that I was a fucking gentleman
Slightly addicted to witnessing bitches stripping in the windows
Getting kicks from clicking pictures, and fiddling with my dick
A sick, sadistic, twisted son of a bitch, that getting pictured
Leaving the Big Sister Building in ripped tights, heels and lipstick
Murdering virgins, I’ll weight a person in for cursing
I’m jerking behind your curtains, slapping a dumb slut for flirting
I’m virtually a demented perverse version of vermin
burning chloroform, smell the vapours, now your turning
Into something I like, I like you laying back silent
While I’m fucking you dyke, you like the way that I’m violent?
don’t care what you say, I’ll keep smiling
I like you straining, stop whining, ok I’m playing the violin
And all the chords are for you, my dick, I’m forcing it through
You gotta understand it bitch that my balls are just blue
I’m a big baller but I wont be another Rik Waller
Cos my dicks smaller and that pricks a little bit taller
I’m like Osama fucking drowning in the Karma
Carnage in the sauna got you fucking laughing in your dorm but
The thoughts I’ve thought up got me fucking caught up in hot water
Now I’m bored of all them calling for my torso to be torn up

thanks people
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 25th, '10, 19:52

I liked the last line :y: Was pretty good though for real I liked the imagery, nice rhyme scheme, wanna see more from ya :b:
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby Enimee » Jan 25th, '10, 23:44

yeh defnitly that was rich very nice man very nice keep at it :y: :y:
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby preest » Jan 27th, '10, 13:10

Thanks people it's appreciated, i'm thinking of putting it on my project I'm working on..we'll see :y:

thanks though

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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby gutawafang » Jan 28th, '10, 06:41

Fucking quick and sick man. Good jobb. :y:
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby preest » Jan 31st, '10, 18:03

Thanks alot bro :y:

Bump!
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 31st, '10, 18:07

what happened with your shit with bone thugs i think it was, did you get to perform ?

yeh thats how long its been since i seen ya on the forum man
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby preest » Jan 31st, '10, 18:25

thats a long story man, the whole concert didnt happen, it was also warren g and glasses malone in it but something happened and they called the whole thing off, so nah I didnt get to perform but my producer has been working with Daz Dillinger so we're hoping to do something live with him when he comes over!!

I been on the forum but I been working on my album and had loads of shit to do so I aint been posting music or lyrics up on here, just been sitting on everything in case it gets used for albums or mixtapes!! :y:
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 31st, '10, 19:07

preest wrote:thats a long story man, the whole concert didnt happen, it was also warren g and glasses malone in it but something happened and they called the whole thing off, so nah I didnt get to perform but my producer has been working with Daz Dillinger so we're hoping to do something live with him when he comes over!!

I been on the forum but I been working on my album and had loads of shit to do so I aint been posting music or lyrics up on here, just been sitting on everything in case it gets used for albums or mixtapes!! :y:



ah, that sucks, but good you still goin at it :y:
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 31st, '10, 19:18

Damn I liked this...for some reason I did it to the "Whats Beef" beat...liked it, flow was good...keep it up
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Re: just a quick verse I wrote!

Postby preest » Feb 1st, '10, 21:10

thanks bro :y: :y:

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