first verse for a love song i'm writing (want a girls feed)

[Low Key]

if you love something then you've got to let it go
and if it comes back then that is how you know
that it was meant to be, and you're in front of me
could it really be, that you're one for me?
all our history plays back like a tape
and sometimes i cry 'cause more than i can take
but you would be surprised how much longer i can wait
to be right there by your side, this love just cannot be fake
i could hold you close so we could watch the night sky
i could write you notes that prove that i'm the right guy
you know i love you girl, i'm missing you at night time
and i'd do anything to get you here by my side
i don't know where i stand when it comes to you and me
even though you say you love me, i just cannot believe -
that you are really into me, 'cause i'm an average guy
and you look like an angel that has fallen out the sky ..

you were right there girl, right by my side
and now you're the reason why at night time i cry
trust is like a vast, if you drop it, it will break
you can fix it back together but it will not be the same
that is why i'm writing this, and that's why i'm afraid
and it's driving me insane, but i promise you i've changed



basically this is for my girlfriend and i wanna get some advice, i didn't wanna go too complicated because it doesn't seem to suit a love song, i hope some girls could give me some feed?

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good...but with my girl, she loves it when I write impossible comparisons...like the planets or sun...and alotta personifications....but this is definately a good start especially if you don't normally do this kinda stuff

[Low Key]

hmmm i get you. do girls ever visit this section lol?

[Fa-Q]

Yea PINK and Fame are here a lot...oh and Lunaverse...yea sorry I aint a chick but chicks fed mine love songs and said they were good