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Blazing

Postby AOBrien09 » Feb 2nd, '10, 17:36

am in blazing form, coming in invading ya'll, persuading the dumb,
and the hater's an all, that am sharper than a razor from,
Gillette, cause a feel this is, the best as lyricist a can get,
yeah you heard an, am serving, ya with this spit like a banquet,
but my screw's are loose, going crazy feeling so confused,
who's wack, man who, like am needing clues,
am coming out of nowhere, at you baby's like peek a'boo's,
a plant lyrical explosions in your ear's, not for spiritual reasons either,
so it's suicidal listening, that I'm spitting an it's off the meter,
or is the saying off the chart's, like songs that have gotten old,
the bong a invention to behold, not to mention it'l rotten ya soul,
give's me the inspiration now and then too dropping cold
spit's, that sounds depressing, cause a found depression,
thank god I finally lost him, now am not surrounded by aggression,
but first ex bitch, we ain't friend's, even if it's been suggested like facebook,
cause your a fake fuck, getting molested a was like rape'n ya slut,
an now a don't make time, for bitches like yourself, when it comes to me health,
I'd rather get fucked by snitches, cause then you won't get std's aswell,

Just something a wrote while a felt in the zone :sweating:
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Re: Blazing

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 2nd, '10, 23:29

Flow was pretty good, some multis didnt match up but it didnt affect it too much..content was good

am coming out of nowhere, at you baby's like peek a'boo's,

^That line was nice and I think if you reworded it could be killer..maybe switch it from a similie to a metaphor

Pretty good drop..keep em comin
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Re: Blazing

Postby AOBrien09 » Feb 2nd, '10, 23:40

Strictt Ame wrote:Flow was pretty good, some multis didnt match up but it didnt affect it too much..content was good

am coming out of nowhere, at you baby's like peek a'boo's,

^That line was nice and I think if you reworded it could be killer..maybe switch it from a similie to a metaphor

Pretty good drop..keep em comin


Thanks maybe some multies out of place some need be pronounced in a certain way to rhyme like last bar :sweating:
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Re: Blazing

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 3rd, '10, 01:48

AOBrien09 wrote:
Thanks maybe some multies out of place some need be pronounced in a certain way to rhyme like last bar :sweating:


I was refering to the first bar, I thought the last bar was ok..
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Re: Blazing

Postby Just Silver » Feb 3rd, '10, 03:17

i liked alot better than some of your older stuff maybe we could collab sometime
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Re: Blazing

Postby AOBrien09 » Feb 3rd, '10, 14:42

Strictt Ame wrote:
AOBrien09 wrote:
Thanks maybe some multies out of place some need be pronounced in a certain way to rhyme like last bar :sweating:


I was refering to the first bar, I thought the last bar was ok..


ok last bar was just a example :sweating:

Just Silver wrote:i liked alot better than some of your older stuff maybe we could collab sometime


Thanks, an yeah definitely :happy:
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