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boilin point

Postby Enimee » Feb 3rd, '10, 18:54

pressure is rising, cant even guage the tempurature its meltin
dissovin these tyrants with hiddens degrees discovered by kelvin

im weldin lyrics together with reinforced titanium plates
im seriously better then these little whores you allowed to replace

the greats in postitions of leadership this shit is pissin me off
cause fags be flipping these bars claimin that there writtens are hard

when its all just recylcled shit from some gods who already said it
its pathetic your verses have no rhetoric and obviously you dont get it

i found my lines buried in the desert only way to trace my scheme is with the sands of time
damn im liein its hipocritic the man is my dad and he planned with signs

this brutal harsh reality we are all force to live in of course i give in
i cant stand the abuse and neglect i would divorce this shit if

i got the option, but i didnt so im stuck in this relationship with a bitch of a spouse
this shit is flippin me out i cant be descriptive with out vulgar words comin out of my mouth

so fuck it






i aint posted in a while so its just a quick keystyle to make me feel more active lol
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Re: boilin point

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 5th, '10, 00:24

LOL..nice concept..I think you shouldve made it longer though, the complexity was on point and the flow was pretty fluent..

keep em comin..this would make a nice series
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Re: boilin point

Postby Enimee » Feb 5th, '10, 16:58

thanks man ima have to add more if you liked it
it was originally just some quick shit tho but we'll see :)
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