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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Low Key » Feb 2nd, '10, 03:44

it's alright, i found it hard to flow though, but you wrote it so obviously you can flow it :y:
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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Low Key » Feb 2nd, '10, 03:49

Coleon wrote:
Low Key wrote:it's alright, i found it hard to flow though, but you wrote it so obviously you can flow it :y:


Yeah I don't really care about those ass lines lol

the only decent one I could have made better was the Pen'd down one haha

i liked the second line lol
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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Relapse.LP » Feb 2nd, '10, 09:08

Y'all sleeping on some of the wordplay. Loved the Pen'd line; keep it up. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Solace » Feb 5th, '10, 18:39

I'm a leave you at the end of a test....pen'd down
you couldn't be BAD unless those were your grades

Damn those are fucking tight. :y:
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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Emadyville » Feb 5th, '10, 20:57

Yeah wordplay was dope, this was one of those simple yet amazing dope pieces, the simplicity adding to it's greatness, I honestly loved this, great piece homie :smoking:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Spyder » Feb 5th, '10, 22:15

i thought i commented on this :o
under a diff name :o
LP y you only post on Cole's shit :o
i know youll respond to that :smoking:

anyway i like it :y:


















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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby Spyder » Feb 5th, '10, 22:46

your fuckin wierd, everyone else understands me :'(

i thought i had commented on this piece, but i thought it had a differnt title

simple enough fo yo ass :angry:
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Re: Head In The Clouds #1

Postby survce » Feb 6th, '10, 01:26

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