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The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

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The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby classthe_king » Feb 6th, '10, 18:28

I'm writing a 72 line verse lol, but this is just the first 16

My heart is a twisted chamber, warped by this instant danger
When I spit, I don't miss, I rip when I vent this anger
This vicious banger will leave you cowards hangin by a thread
You can cry and beg, but me goin soft? I'd rather die instead
As I lie in bed patiently waitin for my time to laugh
Tenaciously breakin every adversary's spine in half
My defining wrath treads in the wake of a movement
My dedication to music will shred, degrade and abuse it
There's no betta fate its conclusive, I love the music
But honestly I didn't get into hip hop for the love of music
I got into hip hop so that I could be above the students
At Miamisburg who did not want nothin to do wit
Me, just cause I wasn’t hot enough, man fuck its stupid
So I just keep writing everyday because I love improvement
And there's one girl in particular, but I won't speak her name
And give her a peek a fame, then she'll receive the pain
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby Spyder » Feb 6th, '10, 19:23

reminded me of Big Pun idk why

good shit man, its nice to see your write so more sincere stuff taking a break from the punches and what not. good shit
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 6th, '10, 21:39

Those first few multis were retarded..sick ass shit man..imagery was excellent, the flow went effortless and still kept a great lyrical content..

One of the better drops Ive seen from you..
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby classthe_king » Feb 7th, '10, 00:03

Thanks guys :worship:
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby classthe_king » Feb 7th, '10, 16:19

Bump :angry:
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 7th, '10, 16:28

Yeah man I really didnt like the old style but this :y: Multies all day :worship:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby classthe_king » Feb 7th, '10, 18:43

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah man I really didnt like the old style but this :y: Multies all day :worship:


Thanks, but what do you mean?
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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 7th, '10, 18:49

Just like to hear dope multies over ok punches idk just me. Sometimes people do alot of punches and are lik eh ya know and makes them kinda put the ret on hold. I love the fuck that I'm gettin multis in style lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: The Enmity of the Mind Part 1

Postby classthe_king » Feb 7th, '10, 18:50

Yah-hah wrote:Just like to hear dope multies over ok punches idk just me. Sometimes people do alot of punches and are lik eh ya know and makes them kinda put the ret on hold. I love the fuck that I'm gettin multis in style lol


haha, alright i gotcha ;)
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