The Enmity of the Mind Part 2

[classthe_king]

This isn't nearly as good lyrically as part 1, but alot of shits been happening and she's all i can thing about. I can't write about anything else so for now this is what we've got.

It goes right off of part 1

If I succeed in aims, I'll be rich with the fortune and fame
And I'll make sure she'll never have a portion to claim
This is more than a game, it saved me before I bled right out
Cause if it wasn’t for hip hop I would be dead by now
My only motivation for living is when you want me back
And my satisfaction as I stare at you and fucking laugh
Since im in front we act like everything is fine now
Cause I got signed, wow, well your about to find out
That you had you had a chance, I find a lot that’s funny
About you wanting me back cause I got the money
Cause im on top n' running till I can't see you no more
I would go for the gold but my knees are so sore
My flow's roar scares off all whose actin phony
But to be honest my final plan for us was matrimony
Yeah that's right, that night where you sat n told me
Your inner feeling and you loved me, that was only
What I wanted but now I see I'll only be fat n lonley
Music is the only thing forever is what rap has showed me

[mcZu]

Not bad, some rhymes seemed kinda basic.. As in not unique, content is good though. Deep ish, I like that. Dunno why you talking from a perspective where you got signed and you're rich. But it's dope. Keep this up man.

[Spyder]

agree with cole fully

nice to see you found a lady

[classthe_king]

Not bad, some rhymes seemed kinda basic.. As in not unique, content is good though. Deep ish, I like that. Dunno why you talking from a perspective where you got signed and you're rich. But it's dope. Keep this up man.

IDK EITHER. I just have this vision of being rich and her crawling back to me and wanting me back and i tell her no that keeps me motivated so i just wrote about it.

Thanks cole and spyder

But spyder i dont and never "had a lady" You obviously haven't been reading my pieces

[Spyder]

cole wtf are you talkin about

and @ class, i read it as you had one
wishful thinkin

[classthe_king]

I'd like somones opinion besides the generals for once

[classthe_king]

You guys havent had one in a while, and i gave some really good feed to one of your pieces

[Relapse.LP]

Good rhyming and shit, but up your vocabulary.

Makes it more singular and less generic.

[classthe_king]

Thanks ill try to do that

[tjb]

nice , idk i say screw whether the rhymes r basic or not
if its smooth like this, then im down wit it

[Relapse.LP]

nice , idk i say screw whether the rhymes r basic or not
if its smooth like this, then im down wit it

lol

[classthe_king]

Haha thanks