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Apollo's Grin ft. Fa-Q, Yah-hah and mcZu

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Apollo's Grin ft. Fa-Q, Yah-hah and mcZu

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 14th, '10, 12:08

We made this awhile back and NO ONE AT ALL FED IT. You kidding me, Fa-Q me and Zu on a track and not one single person fed it.

(Fa-Q)
I'm falling away, from friends, I think peers,
Are thinking I'm fading away, like ink smears,
Or paint smudges, I promise there aint grudges,
But instead of marching in, this saint trudges,
I feel like I've had nothing but these fake, hollow friends,
That are no more than dead leaves, that follow winds,
I fall victim to their fake smiles, and it takes miles,
For me to finally realize, that they're Apollo's grins,
So should I try to move on, and try to harden my heart,
And pardon the part, where they abandoned me,
Like some kinda standin tree, well guess what,
And they left me, swingin on the tire swing,
I'm plannin to flee, and I'm like a stranded bee,
Finded the desire to sting, I'm like a volcano,
About to explode, I've got fire to bring,
So I doubt your road,
Full of twists and turns, so fightin with you just make my fists burn,
So tell me, how's it feel, to be on the outside lookin in,
You'll find yourself at the end of your path, it has a crooked end,

It seems all my friends are turning enemies,
All what I hate and fight, is turning in to me,
So if I fight with grins, the God of War, Apollo,
But win or lose, I'll always come up more hollow,

(Yahhah)
I'm waiting for this day to be over but it's barely even started,
I'm lost within my eyelids these islands rarely being charted,
I'm through with readin this book though the start's being opened,
Put my soft heart in the freezer to have my heart re-frozen,
And from the start we're chosen to live outcast,
I'm drowning in the ocean lifegaurd just swims out past,
Like damn I try not to use multis in my suicide letter,
I'm smiling just to fully make you and I better,
It only proves that I'm better but I'll keep my ego low,
Cause I strive to live forever but we both know,
We don't know where we both go but I've got a suggestion,
I'm failing this class to be honest no question,
My attempts to move on are met with brick walls,
The sick calls from the tombstones I trip on,
I fear the sight of Apollos grin,
Stranded in the desert sand but damn I got swallowed in,

It seems all my friends are turning enemies,
All what I hate and fight, is turning in to me,
So if I fight with grins, the God of War, Apollo,
But win or lose, I'll always come up more hollow,

(McZu)
This pain is Self Inflicted per E, such as Katy,
My head is trembling and shaking, very much like Haiti,
Glory, that’s where the hate be, well, maybe,
That’s the story of my art, and hearts hiccup,
Because my environment is like Antarctica,
And the next second I’m surrounded by the Sahara,
I’m not mentioning caps when I say era,
I’m like a pure diamond stolen from Sierra..Leone,
Sometimes I just Get Up like Ciara with the urge to be left alone,
My life is in stanzas, will my death be a vignette in stone?
Dreams are fake, life? Sure, real, that’s what I feel,
Sometimes I wish life were surreal, for real,
They told me ‘move on, there plenty more fish in the sea, reality is within’,
But, see, what if I can’t reel it in? Is that what I feel within?
No fuel within There’re just a few with him, am I fool that’s sinking?
I’m just beginning, I’m confident with my insecurities,
I’m too confident to be in security,
A con that’s fed to be in secluded mystery,
So that’s why I’m walking ‘round deluded in misery,
So now Apollo's grins are in me,

It seems all my friends are turning enemies,
All what I hate and fight, is turning in to me,
So if I fight with grins, the God of War, Apollo,
But win or lose, I'll always come up more hollow
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Apollo's Grin ft. Fa-Q, Yah-hah and mcZu

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 14th, '10, 12:17

Yeah, each individual verse is a great, but as a song I don't think it works. The verses just don't connect for me. It seemed like you all just went off on a tangent and foced the words "Appollo's grin" at the end of your verse.
Bottom line: If any one of you did it solo, it'd be awesome. But trying to mix three personal verses from three people on the internet and making a serious song out of it won't happen.
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