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Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 16th, '10, 22:25

this song has the muchies so please feed it


I am livin my life, trapped in a hazy dream
Everything slows down, all the days just seem
Like they go In slow mo, when I blow dro
It's my pothead paradise, you should go, bro

Wake up in the morning after gettin some good sleep
With all the weed and new ports, my lungs could bleed
Just got some hood seeds, I throw in some pot
Also got a bag, roll it up, I'm blowin some pot
Realize iv become shot, lungs rot, yet im feelin great
now I lack the funds for my habit, gotta steal in weight
When I Hop in my car, I realize I forgot my last jay
I had an ounce of weed but I smoked it the past day
So now I'm tryin to get some good bud in a fast way
Get to the shifty dealers house strapped, flash, spray
Now I got a stash, yay, time to get some dutchies
gun out, at the deli, screaming "Yo, don't touch me"
"I don't wanna shoot for loot, just a box of phillies"
He hands the box over and yells "please don't kill me"
hop in my car, speed back home, and I stash my three guns
Its only ten oclock in the morning, my day just begun

I am livin my life, trapped in a hazy dream
Everything slows down, all the days just seem
Like they go In slow mo, when I blow dro
It's my pothead paradise, you should go, bro

Text pete, angelo and mike; my closest three friends
The text doesnt go through, so than I resend
The message is sent, they reply with haste
They fly over to my crib, enter as I twist haze
They sit down as I go to explain my crazy day
But no one is listening, cause theyr in a hazy way
roll up the next blunt, gotta burn the evidence
I got class in an hour but I won't learn it's evident
Feelin heaven sent, feeling really celestial
Smoke another blunt as I go and roll the next L
As I'm doing that, angelo is in the kitchen
I yell in "bro u don't know what ur missin"
I walk in and see that he turned the over on
I can't understand why, I'm so fucken gone
He says "I took a quarter to make some brownies
And my throat hurts cause all the smoke surrounds me''
I am livin my life, trapped in a hazy dream
Everything slows down, all the days just seem
Like they go In slow mo, when I blow dro
It's my pothead paradise, you should go, bro

I sit and wait patienly for the brownies to be baked
Petes passed out on the couch, but to the smell he wakes
We eat the special brownies, and flip on cheech and chong
I got a fat ass blunt, mike a joint and pete the bong
Angelos got a himself bowl, and hes takin totes
I think I'm in the clouds, its just mistaken smoke
Plus at this point I'm feeling extremely edgy
Cotton mouth kicks in, I need someone to fetch me
A fucken pepsi cola or a poland spring water bottle
Mike makes some weed cake, another quarter swallowed
Munchied out as fuck, I need some food to eat
Put on instrumentals, need to groove to beats
I start freestylin, spittin out straight hotness
Pete decides to spit, but he just can't top this
As wer kicking frees we hear a knock on door
Don't know who it is, hope a god damn whore
Look through the peep hole, all I see is fuzz
Adrenaline kicks in and fucken beats my buzz
We dash out the back door, see a fucken crack whore
Cops are gaining on us, I'm wishing I ran track more
I look around the corner and see two under covers
That's when I awake from this dream, I'm under covers
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 16th, '10, 22:34

I liked everything, yes I liked the multis, but the chorus and the title...idk chorus didn't flow well and the name, when takking about drugs needs to be cleverly disguised. :shifty: like the beatles...call it field of Green, or laughter Secret passage or some shit like that
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby classthe_king » Feb 16th, '10, 22:36

ehhhh, its alright for a pot song...I can't get into it much :laughing:
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 16th, '10, 22:39

Fa-Q wrote:I liked everything, yes I liked the multis, but the chorus and the title...idk chorus didn't flow well and the name, when takking about drugs needs to be cleverly disguised. :shifty: like the beatles...call it field of Green, or laughter Secret passage or some shit like that


lol the chorus is the part i got to flow the best... and i actually thought of the title before i wrote it... "because i got high" "how high" "kush" "get em high" are all rap songs with weed right in the title lol... thanks for the feed

classthe_king wrote:ehhhh, its alright for a pot song...I can't get into it much :laughing:


sorry u didnt like it but thanks for the feed
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Ticalrecords » Feb 16th, '10, 22:54

i'd def listen to this wen blazing. and thts all tht matters

u better hav a trippy ass beat, somethin like Twista's Creep Slow
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 17th, '10, 00:16

Ticalrecords wrote:i'd def listen to this wen blazing. and thts all tht matters

u better hav a trippy ass beat, somethin like Twista's Creep Slow


haha thanks man... iv never recorded before but id like to record this... any suggestions for beats?
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Mr.Shady21 » Feb 17th, '10, 04:02

hahaha i love being mentioned in songs :worship:
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 17th, '10, 05:23

Mr.Shady21 wrote:hahaha i love being mentioned in songs :worship:


lmao a rare post from u
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Mr.Shady21 » Feb 17th, '10, 05:42

gotta post when your name is mentioned in a rap lol
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 18th, '10, 19:43

got some more munchies for u to feed
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 26th, '10, 18:07

bump
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 26th, '10, 19:29

-Steven- wrote:"I don't wanna shoot for loot, just a box of phillies"
He hands the box over and yells "please don't kill me"


this is fuckin extremely dope < get it? :shifty:

nah but serious man this is insane everything was on point and the flow in my head as i read this just sounded great

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thanks my man, i appreciate the feedback and glad u enjoyed... i like the dope pun haha
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Kosovic » Feb 26th, '10, 19:51

Kinda skimmed through it.... didnt really like it.
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Re: Pothead Paradise

Postby Edge » Feb 26th, '10, 19:52

Kosovic wrote:Kinda skimmed through it.... didnt really like it.


lmao i figured u wouldnt
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