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Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 17th, '10, 08:34

-A tale of one woman with two unknowing lovers, and her ordeals at the hands of such-

-Act I, The Murder-
(Coleon)

The darkest days of my life, alone tainted in strife
so dark, so cold, thought I'd never even make it alive
craziest mind, but this girl she's tamed me, I find
that lately, that I, have no voices I surpress, I get by
the sun's rays, they just shine, we bind & we share
she taught me to smile, to care, to write when I'm clear
every night, if I dare, I even pray just to keep it
the moments, so serene it's, dear God, focus me ta
be good, I'll never leave her, I meant it, but it begun
the sweetest fruit turns sour when left in the sun
never was dumb, so when all the minutes turned to hours
I knew she wasn't working, or shopping, and my powers
came along with my skower, voices crept upon me
who was he she was with, the thoughts they just stung me
these thoughts were just so ugly, she even told me
that it changed and she was lonely, didn't know me
and that we've grown to be, apart from our life
no hearts ignite at small thoughts at husband and wife
I struggled blind, days wonderin through a black abyss
then it crept upon me, I know this knife that it could slit
a womens throat to bits, so that's a exactly what I did
snuck in unnoticed, and drug her out front to vent
stuck her in her ribs, the moon fell, I split into the mist
no one witnessed what I did, the voices at my dome had quit

-Act II, The Discovery-
(GGGG)

Her infidelity had left her dead to me, but then to see
Her sent to me with reddened cheeks had rendered me bereft of speech
The scarlett on her milk white neck, my heart beat steady, breath by breath
She looked just like a fallen angel, clutch my breast, for lust I wrest
In admiration of her beauty, I have to take her, rape her, sooth me
Lose myself inside her as I ride her, soon I'm shooting,
My every last bit of cum I ever had to give, my love,
My turtedove from up above, there's worse, I've only just begun
Girl, you're just barely dissected like a ceasarian section
Not necessarily sufficient, I wish that my hairy erection
Wasn't so son of a bitching twisted and wretched
But fuck it, I've given it everything it's requested
I throat fuck you figuratively, then literally as well
Your wound feels like pussy, all gushy and swelled
Sure, you died a virgin, but you'll descend into Hell
The whore that you were born as for the Devil himself
My greatest desire is that you could die twice
I'd haste to the fires to find crucified Christ
Just to make you fuck him as he cries on his cross
As virgin Mary sucks dick and works mine to her jaw
A light shines upon me, is it God and his punishment?
No, four cops and I'm on top of a corpse, fucking it
"I love her", I told them, and thine love shalt not lessen
For resurrect thy shalt in Heaven, after mine injection
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 17th, '10, 09:53

I liked this piece...although a bit gruesome we got to see GGGG true colors (or the colors he's showed all along)

Good concept I thought a third verse would have been better an believe it or not I think G4 had an edge on you Co, you weren't lacking just seemed a bit off. Plus G had some crazy wordplay, good job both of yall
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 17th, '10, 10:08

Thanks for checking it.
My verse was more intricate because I put a little more time into it than Cole, that's all.
But what could have possibly made a third verse?
The story is complete, as far as I could tell.
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 17th, '10, 10:11

GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:Thanks for checking it.
My verse was more intricate because I put a little more time into it than Cole, that's all.
But what could have possibly made a third verse?
The story is complete, as far as I could tell.

Coulda had a verse before the first verse that was more of a setup...idk I don't like songs that have two verses...they seem imcomplete
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 17th, '10, 16:53

4G :shakehead: Mad dope
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby Wic Kid » Feb 17th, '10, 16:58

Awesome collab. Twisted as fuck, especially 4G's verse. I loved it.

I'd haste to the fires to find crucified Christ
Just to make you fuck him as he cries on his cross
As virgin Mary sucks dick and works mine to her jaw


This killed. :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby dR3 » Feb 17th, '10, 17:11

Oh God, how much doper can this be? :worship:
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby BabyBLue91 » Feb 18th, '10, 08:00

:o oh my lol I agree with Wic Kid, very twisted..

Cole I love the ending of your verse

I throat fuck you figuratively, then literally as well
Your wound feels like pussy, all gushy and swelled
Sure, you died a virgin, but you'll descend into Hell
The whore that you were born as for the Devil himself


& that's my favorite part from GGGG

you guys are talented!
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 18th, '10, 08:03

Thanks to all for checking it out and for your kind words.
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby gutawafang » Feb 18th, '10, 12:12

Fucking sick. I'm lost for words, period. :worship: Sick and gross. :zipped:
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Re: Coleon feat. GoodGirlsGetGutted, "Twist of Fate"

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 18th, '10, 22:39

Sick and I love it.
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