Thinkin at 6 in the morning

[Yah-hah]

Sitting 6 in the morning unable to feel any kiss,
Only now does the hero see that with zero sleep she is the prettiest,
My emptiness is only filled when I am kissed, her body viewed in full by mine,
Distracted by the actions of her beautiful design,
Never as beautiful a time as the one that we’ve got now,
And we can both run away just once we’ve thought how,
My car can only go so far and the stars are still playing hide and seek,
I’d fly to meet the kindest thing but her eyes can’t see that with her I fly until the sky can’t reach,
Each word I can’t speak for my page is only so long,
With you I can conquer the world, alone I’m only so strong,
My love is the largest ocean with a thousand streams,
When I wake up next to you I stretch out to reach each mountain peak,
Every fountains’ deep know everything I’ve found you keep,
I’m bound to leap right out my seat with your hand in mine I’m now complete,
I‘m sound asleep with open eyes emotions rise in this hopeless fight,
Looking in her soft-spoken eyes yes thats where the ocean lies and me oh I’m just floating by,
I’m hoping my open skies won’t divide but both will shine to show her these aren’t just a poets lies,
But my own disguise to hope that I can forever sit in this golden sky just my girl and I.

[gutawafang]

Flow is good. And it sounds like a keystyle.

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

Sounds like love to me.

[Yah-hah]

Yeah guta it was lol I can't sleep so I'm just up writing and just put watever was on my head ya know. Thanks 4G

[Fa-Q]

I like this Jus...the hide and seek with the stars is an interesting concept, you could probably branch off and make that a separate song...idk but good drop

[Yah-hah]

Yeah I probably will. I'm organizing everything for the book, re-writin and all that and decided to write something new. I'll prolly end up makin it into something bigger thanks for checkin

[Fa-Q]

Yea like Yah said, just keep writing and naturally you start to progress...even if you think its wack just write it out and you'll develop yourslef as a writer through mistakes

[Yah-hah]

Yea like Yah said, just keep writing and naturally you start to progress...even if you think its wack just write it out and you'll develop yourslef as a writer through mistakes

wtf?

[mcZu]

I agree with Fa-Q, there are some interesting concepts in there. I would say take out those lines, and write some verses around them.

[Yah-hah]

I prolly will after class, or during class lol will let yall know. Props for checkin

[mcZu]

Writing verses during class is kick ass, people might start to think that you turned into a nerd 'cause you're taking notes like a madman, lol.

[Yah-hah]

Yeah that happened to me the other day lol chick was like man why are you takin so many notes lol. But I got a test in 15 minutes so I'm hurry and skim the chapter lmao.