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My blade

Postby Just Silver » Feb 19th, '10, 02:44

just something quick KEYSTYLE

Put the cloth to the blade
never soften the pain
im in vain, when its in your veins
all bloodstains upon my shag rug
pull out a sword, see what that does
go back to the blade, polish rubbed
stop sharpen, rinse with suds
flick two lungs with a quick swift lunge
pissed at guns they done get kills numb
not exciting at all, like i know they gonna fall
so i rather takeout their stuffing like a butterball
use a gun at all and its wasted talent
i use metallic talons, to expose your implosion
end those, who felt closer, this is your closure
oh no sir,your ride is done,stab you right through, the side of a bus
no emergency brakes see the drivers a fake
hes a demon in place laughs at maniacal pace
an unreliable race of heart beat will it beat again
will the blood be heat my friend or a cold end
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Re: My blade

Postby lilrossy » Feb 19th, '10, 06:14

see u a bit twisted, haha. nice verse man, i liked it.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: My blade

Postby gutawafang » Feb 19th, '10, 09:38

Structure is fucking awesome, with such a strong base. You dig? :shifty:

fuck it, rhymes pretty good, flows quite ok.

good concept I think, talking about your blade. :y:


Pretty poetic to me. :)
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Re: My blade

Postby Just Silver » Feb 19th, '10, 16:34

gutawafang wrote:Structure is fucking awesome, with such a strong base. You dig? :shifty:

fuck it, rhymes pretty good, flows quite ok.

good concept I think, talking about your blade. :y:


Pretty poetic to me. :)

thanks. :flower:
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