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Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

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Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 01:19

J-Silver

Loneliness is felt the, ground is stable
i feel slight wind, frozen microphone cable
open the book recite later, beautiful mind, earth has shaped her
superb half shaken, air from the bass, with a noise
that deploys ,glass breakage and then slashes taken
to the frontal area, my whole air to ya
mixed with an herbal character
mythological bastard of, the whole element
not relevant sire ,sell my rock to Gaia
tell my heirs i lied too, higher than Aether dude
see i have been cheating with elements
sold my soul for delicate paper from the earth
seldom but caters to my words,
and the air just forms my verbs diverse and concerned
fucked with earth, i do not bother to play
didn't use a condom i could be a father today
now shes mad its gonna shake
air takes my blunt away
both fighting i pray the clouds don't become a lightening spray
and hit combine with dirt, black clouds, and lava bursts
act now, i might get hurt ,so i raise a white flag....

(Chorus)
See if i were to just leave
what would it leave
earth with trees
fire and the leaves
it seems its out of our reach
(x2)

Fa-Q

There's fire, and water, waters's barren, so I buy her a daughter,
Her name is steam, the fire and water, combination,
See abortion is what her mom was facin',
But she decided to keep it, her pride is a secret,
Everyone thinks she's a slut, cause she's always wet all around,
She's had strong legs always, there's an exception, she falls down,
And her husband arson, has a warrant for third degree murder,
He burned down a girls house, and went back to see if her hurt her,
That's when they caught him, now steam and water's crying,
Not knowing his offsprings evaporation, his daughers dying,
Its raining at home, and its burning in jail,
Waters working overtime, and earning his bail,
And each time she doesn't get a shift, she's learning to fail,
And the clear, perfect water, is turning too pale,
The fire in prison, has the desire for women,
He wants to go home with his wife, and bear a new child,
Cause he wants to put off more steam, doesn't care if its fu-tile,

See if i were to just leave
what would it leave
earth with trees
fire and the leaves
it seems its out of our reach
(x2)

J-Silver


....they don't like that, Gaia and Aether be teaming
instant seeds of a demon just add water,
and add smoldering Vulcan,
Mr. Fa-Q they step on you?, we hotter than the molten,
apocalypse it started quick, i just walk so unstressed
even the moons shiny crest, starts to beat me to death
man in the moon in the flesh, ready to rush
reminds me of the recent old man on the bus
he won't stand for it, am i the kid
or im i the youtube audience, shit,
both air and earth are so pissed, meteors pass
blackened light, black and white, like i was reading too fast
one match i will not get passed
sun blocks my poorly mismatched
vision of the earths smashed, air suddenly turns to gas
i start to burn to death, have i learned a lesson
not really im too bright to let the earth revolve around me
so i leap into the air and dissolve softly

See if i were to just leave
what would it leave
earth with trees
fire and the leaves
it seems its out of our reach...
(x2)
Last edited by Just Silver on Feb 21st, '10, 15:49, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 01:50

Are you dissing me when you stay Mr. Fa-Q they step on you?
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 02:00

Fa-Q wrote:Are you dissing me when you stay Mr. Fa-Q they step on you?

no it supposed to be a question mark at the end sort of like being sarcastic like no one would get to you
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 02:05

What did mean by it though?
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 02:17

Fa-Q wrote:What did mean by it though?

basically if someone were to it would be a joke
and you'd be the obvious victor

i thought it was simply put but i guess i can see how u might have thought otherwise :sweating:
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 02:21

Lol well I was just worried...that be gay if you were dissing me when I was the feature lol but I understand
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 04:03

bump :happy:
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 04:55

bumpin last of the night
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 21st, '10, 13:10

I dug it. I didnt get silvers flow on the first verse but the last one was dope. Fa-Q you verse was dope too, didnt like the chorus a whole lot but the concept was real dope
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 15:42

Yah-hah wrote:I dug it. I didnt get silvers flow on the first verse but the last one was dope. Fa-Q you verse was dope too, didnt like the chorus a whole lot but the concept was real dope

lol the chorus was hard to get down as usual
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Re: Just Silver Ft. Fa-Q- The Literary Elements

Postby Yah-hah » Feb 21st, '10, 15:49

Yeah I sick at em so its all good lol
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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