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Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 19th, '10, 18:10

create an ultimatum, for others altercations
smothered words and walked away with,
sentence carcass faceless, periods quotation,
notions and note making ,suppose saying,
those waiting, for my judgment and debating ,
opinions and statements, state i say shit,
cities say it too ,each day and afternoon,
that i wreck detected clues, platitude,
im mad at moods, angry at emotion,
disdain anti compulsive,motives
supposing, i was the murderous clone
of Jeffrey and bones, had been in my home
of every word i have known, would be a surprise
do they think i would hide,
no way jose ,bitch you out of your mind
i mean straight out of it dude
in a mental hospital room
with pillows and a bunch of oxys in you
and once you leave i walk by with a glance
your bowels demand, that you shit in your pants
my vowel command ,with my structure ,sharp wits puncture
all syllable functions ,till it sounds like dumb shit,
like a slurred drunkard in a room all slumping
the point of my bumping, is nothing ,im fronted
i liked the way it sounds in my head
poetry of the undead still living artist ink is bled
so think again if words step to me or tread
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 20th, '10, 02:45

bumpin
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 20th, '10, 22:05

nother bump.. :zipped:
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 23:08

bump... last bump... :whistle:
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 23:22

This was good, enjoyable but I think your pulling an Annon by during too many big words...the lyrics can get drowned out by the amount of wordplay you do...but good drop...liked it alot
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 23:24

Fa-Q wrote:This was good, enjoyable but I think your pulling an Annon by during too many big words...the lyrics can get drowned out by the amount of wordplay you do...but good drop...liked it alot

Thanks Guy :8)
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 23:33

I'm not your guy, friend :smoking:
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby classthe_king » Feb 21st, '10, 23:37

Fa-Q wrote:I'm not your guy, friend :smoking:


I'm not your friend, buddy
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 21st, '10, 23:40

classthe_king wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:I'm not your guy, friend :smoking:


I'm not your friend, buddy

I'm not your buddy, Guy
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Re: Me and my dead words

Postby Just Silver » Feb 21st, '10, 23:44

Fa-Q wrote:
classthe_king wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:I'm not your guy, friend :smoking:


I'm not your friend, buddy

I'm not your buddy, Guy

lol as he floats away on an iceberg
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