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Driven To The Edge

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Driven To The Edge

Postby Medicine Ball » Feb 22nd, '10, 02:22

did you know i cried today, i laid in bed so wide awake
and all the words i've tried to say just seemed to fade and hide away.
and every time i try to pray, God just won't listen to my words
it seems that all my thoughts are drifting in the universe ..
there's four walls in my bedroom and each one is closing in
i look towards the door and i can see an opening
a ring of light around the frame reminds me of a halo now
but there is no escape for me 'cause there just aint no way; no how
i try to be so brave, go out, and meet some people, have some fun
but every single place i go, the people say "they have to run"
so i am left alone again, man i have never known a friend
and i just wanna kill myself, that aint a lie, i don't pretend.
on a ledge i see the sun, in the water, need a gun
take a breath and end my life, i'd rather die than be in one.
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 22nd, '10, 02:30

short and sweet....it was good....keep it up Med Ball
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby Medicine Ball » Feb 22nd, '10, 02:49

Fa-Q wrote:short and sweet....it was good....keep it up Med Ball

thanks Fa-Q
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby gutawafang » Feb 22nd, '10, 04:29

flow is good. multis is good. just good. :y:
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby Solace » Feb 22nd, '10, 04:33

Loved it bro..really felt it.. :y:
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby Medicine Ball » Feb 22nd, '10, 15:45

thanks guys
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Re: Driven To The Edge

Postby classthe_king » Feb 23rd, '10, 02:24

This was dope, keep getting better
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