Element. - Get It Straight (Updated!)

[Element.]

Changed Alot.
Again...

Growin' up friends to brothers, givin' so much respect and still offend like others
everyone bitchin like mothers, allways continue's and the argue smothers
Doin the best for them but mates still hate, not showin' the gate only when it rates
Depression enters food on the plate makin me overweight, no deflate, turnin to a debate
Its gone on so long the date is forgotten, nothin changin late become rotten
goin on i hope you choke on great cotten, gettin on my nerve, transfered with your fate totten

Tell me what you think, i will add more soon.

[Spyder]

spelt enemies wrong

your structure on this piece is bad, and it needs more multies. a drop isnt all about the multies but you need to have em down so that they are second nature.

not bad emotion and good topic because obviously its personal, i just didnt really feel connected to the piece yamean?

keep droppin bro

[Element.]

Yeh i will change it alot anyway and add multi's

[Element.]

bump,

Changed alot.

Feed please.

[Edge]

the flow was a little choppy for me and it lacks multis... iv seen u do better but i guess its b/c this is a more deep piece... not bad tho man

[Element.]

the flow was a little choppy for me and it lacks multis... iv seen u do better but i guess its b/c this is a more deep piece... not bad tho man

i swear i did some multi's in that :S ?

And thanks for the feed

[Edge]

Changed Alot.


Growin' up friends to brothers, givin' so much respect and still offend like others
Everyone bitchin like mothers, allways continue's and the argue smothers
Doin the best for them but mates still hate, not showin' the gate only till it overates
Depression enters food on the plate makin' me overweight, no deflate, turnin' to a debate
Its gone on so long the date is forgotten, nothing changin' late will become rotten

Tell me what you think, i will add more soon.

those r the only two i see and the second one is a stretch

[Element.]

Changed Alot.


Growin' up friends to brothers, givin' so much respect and still offend like others
Everyone bitchin like mothers, allways continue's and the argue smothers
Doin the best for them but mates still hate, not showin' the gate only till it overates
Depression enters food on the plate makin' me overweight, no deflate, turnin' to a debate
Its gone on so long the date is forgotten, nothing changin' late will become rotten

Tell me what you think, i will add more soon.

those r the only two i see and the second one is a stretch

? i showed some others but they are a stretch, but just gettin' use to multi's im sure i will get better at them soon

[Edge]

Changed Alot.


Growin' up friends to brothers, givin' so much respect and still offend like others
Everyone bitchin like mothers, allways continue's and the argue smothers
Doin the best for them but mates still hate, not showin' the gate only till it overates
Depression enters food on the plate makin' me overweight, no deflate, turnin' to a debate
Its gone on so long the date is forgotten, nothing changin' late will become rotten

Tell me what you think, i will add more soon.

those r the only two i see and the second one is a stretch

? i showed some others but they are a stretch, but just gettin' use to multi's im sure i will get better at them soon

only 2/6 sylables rhyme on most of them bro.... they all gotta rhyme

[Element.]

fair enough, but im goin to keep tryin,
Thanks for the feed.

[Edge]

fair enough, but im goin to keep tryin,
Thanks for the feed.

no problem man... if u want help with multis check out some of yah-hahs shit or ask him for help with them cuz he does it the best on here... or just listen to infinite and read along with the lyrics

[Element.]

fair enough, but im goin to keep tryin,
Thanks for the feed.

no problem man... if u want help with multis check out some of yah-hahs shit or ask him for help with them cuz he does it the best on here... or just listen to infinite and read along with the lyrics

Alryt man thanks,

Bump!

[Element.]

Comon Everyone Feed ;/

[X'ed Up]

Good structure, and decent multis....lacks a few tho

I understand its emotional but it needs more multis

Flow was a lil off too, but overall it was decent

[Element.]

Good structure, and decent multis....lacks a few tho

I understand its emotional but it needs more multis

Flow was a lil off too, but overall it was decent

Thanks for the feed man,