new collab with my boy severedmosquito

[lazyhazycrazydavey]

we ain't from chitown, n bitch we ain't from compton
but we listen to Bone, Dre, n Crucial Conflict
just a compilation of looneyville crazies
my boy screwy louie n lazyhazycrazydavey
makin ya sweat, makin ya head a little bit hazy
you're shit don't phase me, cuz my shits amazing
raising the bar, fakin the part, can't believe I made it this far
bodies get charred, poppin it hard, mother fucker don't play it that way
cuz you know I'm makin the charts

louie!!!!

[severedmosquito]

she treat like a don watching for the hit write when im wrong
so i never trip show me how 2 move so i never slip
n baby girl u so major they should page ya god bless the parents who made ya
middle finger 2 any 1 who hates us baby we burn it up

[Fa-Q]

Yall need to work on vocab, structure, multis and wordplay

[lazyhazycrazydavey]

these bitches got me itchin for riches
but glitches keep me from hittin the switches
twitchin n phenin, like I missin the meanin
of what it means to be a man, like I shouldn't even be breathin
but fuck it, I don't even care anymore
stare at the wall? naw I'd rather stare at the door
figure a way, to jiggle it open
until then, I just live for the moment

[lazyhazycrazydavey]

Yall need to work on vocab, structure, multis and wordplay

yeah I know...I'm just puttin down quick shit to get my boys feet wet...he's never really been on a site like this, I'm just tryin to get him into the swing of things...thanx for the imput tho!!

[classthe_king]

Yall need to work on vocab, structure, multis and wordplay

yeah I know...I'm just puttin down quick shit to get my boys feet wet...he's never really been on a site like this, I'm just tryin to get him into the swing of things...thanx for the imput tho!!

How is this getting his feet wet? I have literally NEVER seen something like this.

[severedmosquito]

they call me louie g these bitches wana c
what i got n they wana challange me but thats a bad move they will c
ill put you down like a ton of trees i will be rite here you c
puttin down rythmes with my homie davie fuck all ya haters who dont believe
the platnium duo got what you need

[severedmosquito]

Yall need to work on vocab, structure, multis and wordplay

yeah I know...I'm just puttin down quick shit to get my boys feet wet...he's never really been on a site like this, I'm just tryin to get him into the swing of things...thanx for the imput tho!!

How is this getting his feet wet? I have literally NEVER seen something like this.

don't be a bitch, if you don't like what we got...don't pay attention...

[Fa-Q]

Dude...mosqu. You gonna have to feed off the critizism cause your gonna get a lot of this on this site....study everybody elses writing and learn from it...this was bad...but get better

[lazyhazycrazydavey]

Dude...mosqu. You gonna have to feed off the critizism cause your gonna get a lot of this on this site....study everybody elses writing and learn from it...this was bad...but get better

he's new to writing, but I agree he needs to work off of the criticism...no worries, thanx

[2sDay]

feet wet

im sorry thats funny

anyways i agree with Fa-Q

[severedmosquito]

Dude...mosqu. You gonna have to feed off the critizism cause your gonna get a lot of this on this site....study everybody elses writing and learn from it...this was bad...but get better

ya i no i do i havent been doing this long

[Yah-hah]

Yeah I mean everyone aint like amazing when they first start, I know I wasn't. But yeah man like they said, check out everyones stuff on here, there are alot of good CW cats on here, like me, Fa-Q Coleon, Spyder, guta, edge a bunch. Just gotta find your own flow and rip that shit up ya know. Look forward to seein yall improve man