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Postby tjb » Feb 25th, '10, 02:57

so we just keep kickin an pushin like mr. fiasco
i kickflip with like sixflips, burnin the half pipes like tabasco
cause a complete fiasco, the way i tony hawk it
off like a rocket, me on a board equals toxic
classic like moxy, hard so call my me roxy
so im like a diamond see i sorta last forever
explode like mines, take these fags an bash em all together
cuz im brute im brash, wearin all black like johnny cash,
in fact thats what im doin pursuin the johnny cash
like Cream! get the money dolla dolla bill yall
so when im steamin in the cream your dreamin in ya pitfalll
in cash stacks your not even a bit tall
so why the fuck you think you can talk to this boss
godather, pristine an presitigious with these drops
but you ignore the music, imagine the gold an think ROB
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Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 25th, '10, 03:01

I'm not tr, I'm GGGFuckingG.
It's not bad, minus some typos.
(call my me roxy)
You used the word "fiasco" twice in the first 3 bars.
That's a no-no.
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Postby Fa-Q » Feb 25th, '10, 03:09

Your right...we don't...lol just kidding it aint bad...I hate your name tho...change them to all caps or something else
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Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 25th, '10, 03:17

tjb is better lowercased than caps.

TJB makes The Jizz Bomber look more obvious.
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Re: tr wont like this..

Postby tjb » Feb 25th, '10, 03:18

GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:I'm not tr, I'm GGGFuckingG.
It's not bad, minus some typos.
(call my me roxy)
You used the word "fiasco" twice in the first 3 bars.
That's a no-no.



didnt mess up one was a name the other wass a situation
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Re: tr wont like this..

Postby tjb » Feb 25th, '10, 03:20

GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:tjb is better lowercased than caps.

TJB makes The Jizz Bomber look more obvious.



how the fuck do i change my name
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Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 25th, '10, 03:23

Your name is fine, but if you seriously want to, pm either SajN or Yoshi and ask them to.
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Postby tjb » Feb 25th, '10, 03:28

hahaha you sort of ruined it for me plus i thought of this rele sick one :D
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