Behind The Act

[Solace]

The seeping pain leaves me drained, I wanna be put to death,
A staring fool who glares at you, I'm so shook and messed,
You're why I look depressed, though I wouldn't tell you that,
I'm an eager rabbit with a habit to always be dealt in traps,
I try to spark conversation, but you just don't listen see,
Literally ripping me to point where I have some stitches need,
There's nobody you won't chill with, ya face fills the scene,
Well, I'm a nobody too so why can't you stay, chill with me?
You chill with anybody if it isn't me, I'm just being honest here,
Is it a sin to make my limits break to points where I start to tear,
Pretend to be the hardest here with expressions you can't understand,
Break down everyday now, life's a ride but not Wonderland,
The way I feel about you. Write my emotions, burn the paper,
Let's just say I'm feeling doubtful that you'd return the favour,
And you can laugh, damn I'll just pretend it doesn't hurt,
I'll pretend I love the hate when really there is nothing worse.

[Arabian Shady]

haha, very clever piece omar,
i liked the laid back flow on this, simple and meaningfull
excellent read brotha

[Solace]

I thought no one would check this.

Thank you dude. I'm glad you liked it.

[Almostlity]

Did you poop a virgin? cause that shit is tight.

[Solace]

^I can't believe you said that.

[classthe_king]

Did you poop a virgin? cause that shit is tight.

OMG

[Arabian Shady]

:wub: I thought no one would check this.

Thank you dude. I'm glad you liked it.

lol , anytime homie

[Spyder]

Did you poop a virgin? cause that shit is tight.

dope piece sol, loved all the internal rhyming along with those multies

[Enimee]

i really liked the rhyme scheme and the theme was on point but your flow was kinda choppy cause you didnt stick to the lines the breakdown was tight at first u shud have kept it, as someone aforementioned, with all the internal rhyming? id keep it consistent as to give the peice a strong backbone

[Solace]

Thanks Spy&Enimee