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just rhymin

Postby UzaKING » Mar 1st, '10, 07:36

uhh ya just wanted to write something that rhymed a lot lol

your now witnessing a gruesome mission
this is my kingdom and prison
you cant fathom this system, just imagine or envision
a written anthem using the proven weapon of wisdom
while im spitten frozen venom at victims
im just a phantom stuck in a prism with one psycho symptom
i combo deathblows at a rhythm of maestros
when my flow gets exposed my lungs get unfroze
then my airflow blows snow thru the cosmos
i suppose you now know this is heros in plain clothes
living in ghettoes some pose like hoboes
but most chose to live like joe schmoes


might add more to it later not sure
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Re: just rhymin

Postby WhatsAnEnigma » Mar 1st, '10, 08:07

I stopped after you spelled witnessing wrong.
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Re: just rhymin

Postby UzaKING » Mar 1st, '10, 08:10

WhatsAnEnigma wrote:I stopped after you spelled witnessing wrong.


what the fuck are you talking about :whistle:
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Re: just rhymin

Postby WhatsAnEnigma » Mar 1st, '10, 08:14

uzaking wrote:
WhatsAnEnigma wrote:I stopped after you spelled witnessing wrong.


what the fuck are you talking about :whistle:


I'm talking about how you fixed one word yet left another 5 wrong, but it's okay nobody's perfect.
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Re: just rhymin

Postby Arrinef » Mar 1st, '10, 08:30

WhatsAnEnigma wrote:I stopped after you spelled witnessing wrong.

you're kidding right?
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Re: just rhymin

Postby WhatsAnEnigma » Mar 1st, '10, 08:44

ArrineF wrote:
WhatsAnEnigma wrote:I stopped after you spelled witnessing wrong.

you're kidding right?


Well, I glanced over the rest quickly but felt like stopping halfway through because I didn't feel like reading. So to answer you no I wasn't kidding.
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Re: just rhymin

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 1st, '10, 09:04

Don't you hate assholes...
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Re: just rhymin

Postby WhatsAnEnigma » Mar 1st, '10, 22:57

Fa-Q wrote:Don't you hate assholes...


It was criticism, and don't you hate either.
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Re: just rhymin

Postby Enimee » Mar 2nd, '10, 00:03

i liked it, lacked consistency tho, but other then that it was a fairly sick rap clap clap
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