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bored in class. one verse

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bored in class. one verse

Postby SAballa99 » Mar 3rd, '10, 21:47

sitting here is psychology class
this isnt where i'm suppose to be at
people questioning why my brain hurts
cause we're talking about how the brain works
so i tell them how i ranked up
and all the pranks that got me banked up
becoming my own general
i got my own set of gentiles
i'm laughing, sending out my army
please, you could never harm me
and dont think i can't slaughter
cause all you have to do is ask your daughter
yeah i gave it to her good
just like i promised i would
i'm an animal, no a beast
spead your legs open and i'ma feast
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Re: bored in class. one verse

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 3rd, '10, 21:56

Wow, you need to increase your vocab, make your lines longer, and make your structure better
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