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Ethel's Retinas

Postby gutawafang » Mar 4th, '10, 01:15

All this while, you've been trying to say that?
All the awkward moments we had, this is payback?
The 3 words you didn't say to me just because you were shy?
And now you say them so casually, will you tell me why?
What's the point? It's a period when I say it's the end
No point in the numbers, the only way is to be friends
Heart's used to be so fucking hard like cement
So why now, is there internally a part that presents?
That expresses your feelings all over a social web
There must be a reason you love, are you vocal-trapped?
Are you speechless or something? Why isn't you talking?
You had so much to say when we were side by side walking
Used to be this, used to be that, but now you want it over?
Or you wanna start something? Be extraordinary lovers?
Was there any point in these questions if I actually accept?
Why should I care anymore, why bother writing this rap?
Reject.
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Re: Ethel's Retinas

Postby gutawafang » Mar 5th, '10, 09:24

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Re: Ethel's Retinas

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 5th, '10, 09:33

I liked this...who's this about?
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Re: Ethel's Retinas

Postby gutawafang » Mar 5th, '10, 09:39

Fa-Q wrote:I liked this...who's this about?

I got inspired by this girl called V.

She confessed to a guy called Kyle.

Then I wrote this in the shoes of Kyle.

But then I realised I am also putting myself in Ethel's shoes, a girl I sorta like. Basically I think she'll reject.

Thanks for checking it out man. :y:
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Re: Ethel's Retinas

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 5th, '10, 09:42

Oh ok...interesting concept...and good title
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Re: Ethel's Retinas

Postby gutawafang » Mar 5th, '10, 09:49

Fa-Q wrote:Oh ok...interesting concept...and good title

Thanks homie. :)
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